Comments : Burning love

  • 16 years ago

    by SUSPEKT

    Great work on the poem love it

  • 16 years ago

    by Not

    OMG! I LOVE THIS POEM ITS AND I REALLY THOUGHT THE PART WHEN YOU SAID"CANT STOP THINKING ABOUT YOU MEMORIES PRINTED IN THE BACK OF MY MIND" AW THAT IS SO SWEET! GREAT WRITE!!!...=]

  • 16 years ago

    by she

    Nice work, good imagery

  • 15 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Good job!
    keep writing!

    Pooja

  • 15 years ago

    by Cody Jo as you no

    WOWSERS that is a very awsome write and i hope the person you wrote that about nos how much you care!!!!

  • 15 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    This is a really great poem. I loved reading it. Great job. Shanik

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Your so hot, you leave burn marks on my fingers

    ^
    I would change hot to another word. Or just change the first part completely. I think a metaphor or simile would work good here. :] "Your skin is like flames leaving burn marks on my fingers." Something like that. :]

    i never felt this way before

    ^
    It should say I've instead of I. :]

    when i touch, your warmth heals my pain

    ^
    This part doesn't make that much sense.. maybe say "When we touch" for the beginning.

    you is all i think of, knowing this burning love

    ^
    "You're all I think of" would make a whole lot more sense. :]

    I think this was a very heartfelt poem, it just had a few grammar errors. They're small though and easily fixed. :] Great poem!

    Cayce