Only you can set me free

by Cathie   Jan 29, 2008


My mind is in a mess
but I don't really care
because my soul is strong
as long as you are there

My body is acking
from inside out
and even when I'm broken
I feel so proud

I'm controlled by other people
but still I claim I'm not
I don't care about their opinion
but they controle what I've got

I feel trapped in all this
I'm drowning beneath the ice
I only live for the moment
when I look into your eyes

Hope to see you soon
hope you'll stop my pain
only you give me reason to hope
that one day, your love, I'll gain!

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  • 16 years ago

    by Letty

    This is a very beautiful poem that you have written here. I loved the flow and the imagery of it. I also loved the emotion that you put in to it. You should add punctuation though and also run a spell check for misspelled words. For example, in the second stanza first line you wrote:

    My body is acking

    Acking is misspelled; it should be "aching".

    And also in the third stanza last line you wrote:

    but they controle what I've got

    Controle is misspelled; it should be "control".

    As I said run a spell check over it again just in case I missed a few words; and add punctuation. Punctuation plays a big part in poetry. It's like a tour guide to the reader. Over-all I still say great job. I really did enjoy reading this and think that you are a very good writer.

    Letty

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