Comments : Looking

  • 16 years ago

    by Noir

    "heart's have turned into stones
    killed white dove"

    I love the symbolism in this poem, for example white symbolizes pure and innocence and dove symbolize peace.

    I think if you turned the word "stones" for stone. It would have a better impact...

    Also I think the lines:

    Looking for (the) awoke(en) soul

    Would bring the reader more into the poem, just a thought...

    All in all, this is a pretty good poem, which uses metaphor...Alot of poems, I see today, fail to do that.

  • 16 years ago

    by Heer

    Thanks for the advice

  • 16 years ago

    by Erickson

    Great ones, especially .heart's have turned into stone
    killed white dove. keep it up.