I like it. although the rhyming does seem allitle forced it is a captured something different there. dunno wat u were trying to say by those a b things but oh well. please comment on my newest poem thanks.

A truely nice poem. The structure was one of those I didn't see before, and for that I was amused. The rhyming and raw emotions really did their work. Nice job 5/5

Great work on this one! i love the purness and innocent nature of it! It was great.. i've never seen this type of poem before, but i loved it! You really did a great job with it! Keep it up! :]