Comments : I am yours and u are mine

  • 16 years ago

    by waiting 4 some1

    If you mean what you have said then i can tell that guy is super lucky,

    just who is this guy?? oh! i know, he is your sweet fuzzy......Diego
    lol

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    I absolutly love this poem... it is beautiful and it flows great...

  • 16 years ago

    by DoWnToWn

    I love the poem... you're very lucky to find someone dat you love so much!

  • 16 years ago

    by Mike Martin

    I agree with all the coments...you are so very lucky....most of us never find that...be happy....I love this poem....xoxoxo

  • 16 years ago

    by Arun Khan

    Thats such a sweeet poem! keeep it uup! :D :D

  • 16 years ago

    by Bryce

    I think this has to much wording describing one thing, but i really enjoyed it.
    Bryce

  • 16 years ago

    by LUIS SO FREASH

    Nice poem

  • 16 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Alright, again like the previous comment I left, the structure needs work, it's like you're writting a paragraph, making it into stanzas would be a help.

    For example take,

    "I am your girl and you are my man together in this world we will stand hand in hand.

    we will make through the bad and the good and no matter what we may go through baby i promice i will always stay true."

    and change it to this:

    I am your girl,
    And you're my man.
    Together in this world
    We'll stand hand in hand.

    We'll make it through
    The bad and the good.
    And we'll love one another,
    Just like we've always had.

    And no matter what
    We may go through,
    Baby I promise
    I'll always stay true.

    So there you have it, I little bit of work and this can turn from just ok, to outstandingly written.

    Again I must state, I do like the way you worded it, it has good flow, and can be excellent with a few additions like I stated above.

    Peace, Joe