Comments : How long

  • 16 years ago

    by waiting 4 some1

    It's not a early to think of having an ANGEL at this age as long as you both sure that you will stay forever and truly love each other.
    my advice to you is to get married first then do whatever you like...

    best wishes to have the happiest life ever

  • 16 years ago

    by Lemma

    I know how it feels to be long-distance, it is really hard but if really love each other then there's no reason at all why this shouldn't work out. Sweet poem that I can really relate to, 5/5.

    Em xXx

  • 16 years ago

    by Mike Martin

    I can relate to this alot. I too am long distance. It's very hard, but you must believe that the love you have foreach other is stronger then the distance is long. A baby...idk if that is really the answer, only you can answer that. I like this poem, there's feeling and concern...5/5....xoxo

  • 16 years ago

    by Arun Khan

    I really liked this one... we've all been there :D keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Bryce

    To tell you the truth, I likes this one.
    I really don't like long poems, but i enjoyed this one.
    Bryce

  • 16 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wow, ok, first of all the structure is horrible, it's like you're writting a paragraph. Perhaps making it into stanzas would be a major help.

    For example take,

    "I dont know what to think or even to say.
    I still cant see how you want to stay.

    I'm so happy that we can still be together and i hope with all my heart it will be forever."

    and change it to this:

    I don't know what to think,
    Or even what to say.
    And I still can't see,
    How you want to stay.

    I am extreamly happy,
    We still can be together.
    And I hope with all my heart,
    It will be forever.

    Also the grammer and puncuation has to be fixed here and there. For example, "dont" should be, "don't" and "quetion" should be, "question" ..... etc.

    With a little bit of structure, grammer and puncuation, this can be an excellent write from you, but at the moment I feel it is just good, but not great.

    Keep up the good work!!! I do like the way you worded it, it has good flow, and can be excellent with a few additions like I stated above.

    Peace, Joe

  • 16 years ago

    by Alvaro

    =] last 4 lines made me chuckle a bit.. for how true it is and how it plays a role in my life so far.. thank you.. for capturing such a feeling in simple words, thank you 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by jayson salvador

    Very nice. relates to a lot of people. keep up the good work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Prasad Baadkar

    After all one gets a reason to live and die for each other .. Tatz love, Thatz love........ Marvellous