Comments : Remember

  • 12 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    Wow.. i love how deep ur emotions get in ur writing. its very intresting and i enjoy it very much

  • 12 years ago

    by FridusBlueheaven

    Another simply great poem by you. And also another excellently written one...

    I really adore this line:
    Shield the face of the shameful; remember the good when there is nothing but bad.

    Really really impressing!!!
    Another 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by TheRapture03

    I like it. it has good flow and a good message. My only problem is that, to me, it sounds like you are trying to preach something, which idk if thats what you were going for or not. Other than that i liked it.

  • 11 years ago

    by kate

    This poem is amazing I could picture it happening. I love how you had where we hold our hearts when we lose someone that we love so much. We don't want to let go of the pain but yet we do have to, to make sure everything will be ok. No matter what though there will be always that little crack in our heart from that one person that have left us but doesn't mean we can't still use it. Im sorry for your lost and everyone else that have lost someone so close that we love.

    keep it up.
    keep on writing.
    love always and forever.

  • 11 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Hold the broken heart in your hand, shelter it from the upcoming pain.
    ^^ such a great image here you have a talent with words!

    Cover the ears of the innocent.
    ^^why shield from innocence?

    Smile to the pure soul.
    ^^another great image here

    Say goodbye to the memory cry the tears for the future.
    ^^preparation is what comes to mind

    Shield the face of the shameful; remember the good when there is nothing but bad.
    ^^really a hard thing to do but if you can it really helps

    Try to fill the never ending hole.
    ^^never works : /

    Sit in the corner, cry in silence.
    ^^been there done that!

    Mourn the lost, hope for the good in heart.
    ^^to get through life you have to hope

    I lost the one I loved, forever their names remembered
    ^^losing a loved one hurts and the pain never ends...
    very very good poem
    it was well written and solid
    even though it was short, it had everything it needed
    5/5