I liked it. It was really good, really emotional. It was a little short tho, but that's ok.

Aw such a sad love poem.
Don't you hate that you liked this
person so much and then just everything
that reminds you..yeah. well you get it .
Lol well done i really liked it./
5/5
<3tay

I truely enjoyed this piece, I found the emotion to be beautifully sad and well expressed throughout the entire thing. Your word choice is really stunning and effective creating an elegant feel over the atmosphere. I loved the length of this short and sweet. Your flow is smoothe and the meaning behind this is quite heartfelt. An amazing poem with a simple structure. Well done. Loved it. Definitly deserving of a 5/5 from me. ~Mel

Pretty short, pretty simple and amazingly beautiful poem. This is really sad and I can relate it from line after line. Everything was just smooth, Very well written, so well deserved 5/5

Wow... I love this. Your choice of words is excellent and whole poem is truly original and interesting. Superbly written love piece, filled with deeply touching emotions. Every stanza possess captivating atmosphere and the flow is flawless from the beginning to the end.
My favorite stanza is:

- Dismantle my heart
erase my memories
plead with my soul
just disregard me-

Heartfelt piece...
5/5 from me

There seems to be a lot of potential in this poem, good work. I especially enjoyed the first stanza, however I felt as though the intensity dropped in the following stanzas.

2nd Stanza: I don't think you should have switched to the use of participles in these lines. The use of present perfect (as you did in the first stanza) lends a sense of immediacy to the writing and more effectively draws the reader in.

3rd and 4th Stanza: You switched from the present to past tense, why? It doesn't seem to be crucial to the narration of the poem. for instance, 3rd line, 3rd stanza: "you were through" - past tense? This is confusing to the reader as it presents a shift in the timeframe of the poem.

This is especially true in the last stanza: "my life WAS misconstrued" instead of... say, "my life IS misconstrued" - as before, keeping it in the present tense grounds the reader in a sense of urgency that seems necessary with the sort of emotion you are trying to convey.

Keep in mind, this is all constructive criticism. Like I said, I think there's enormous potential here, and I did enjoy the concept. I hope you consider revising and fine tuning the poem, I would love to read it again.

Theres mucho emotion. the lack of grammatical punctuation makes it difficult to understand the flow however.

I really enjoyed this poem well done!!!!!

Very nice. loved it. fave part was when you said that you hated everything because everything reminded you of him/her. sorry, im terrible at quotes....anywho. very lovely. definitely should punctuate, but besides that, the flow is amazing. love it!

Great write.enjoyed reading it, sad though.

Excellent write. I like your choice of words and the overall structure of the poem, however; I felt it could be better if you had puncuation within this poem. It would've made the poem a little stronger in my opinion.

Peace, Joe

Sad poem to say the least, but excellent in every way nonetheless. Your really good, keep writing :).

My fav part:
restraining my tears,
plummeting to the floor,
it's all out on my sleaves,
emerging near life's door.

5/5 across the board.

I really enjoyed the poem it really touched me in many diffrent ways

Awwww

soooo sweet and sad at the same time

This poem is so good, i feel i can relate to it

fav lines:
restraining my tears,
plummeting to the floor,
it's all out on my sleaves,
emerging near life's door

Your amazing.