Looks like you spent a lot of time on this 1, it's really good great job
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Wow, that was really good. Definitely made me think. Such a great flow and vivid imagery. great job 5/5

I really like the use of old English in this poem, it's really effective and makes it different to mosst of the stuff I usually read.

"For all you wish, and all you get,

Is punishment for what you forget."

Loved those lines. 5/5

Em xXx

Beautiful it was hard to understand i had to read it twice haha but i enjoyed it both times, unique in every way, havnt read a poem like that in this site ever! so it was a new experience, small one but great, i love it flawless but again its new to me so i dont know any of the flaws but it read switftly through me

The amount of effort you put in this appears to be tremendous, and the word choice was absoultly amazing, I really loved this poem, in a way I wish I had understood it better, but it is still a well written peiece keep up the good work 5/5

I don't fully understand, but I'm not totally lost. lol. The only line that threw me off really is the one with "granth" it doesn't seemed to sound right like "grantith.. or granteth" lol.. idk it sounds funny.

I like the style you put it in. Like a prophet speaking.. condemning the unrighteous.. something of the like.

Also .. you capitalize a lot of the letters in the beginnig of the lines. and some you don't... Could you capitalize them? I know I'm anal. But it bothers me lol.

Great Write

5.5

Give me your other title and I'll do that one too.

Scratch that: gimme your other title.. i was confusing you with someone else. lol sorry!

I'm not used to olde words -- so the first time I read this, it drew a blank and I literally went, HUH? But then I read it again, and now I'm not COMPLETELY lost xD

But thee, Man, knowth not the price of sin,
`That line was the first line to really jump out at me. Words that speak such truth -- such reality packed into a few simple words.

For all you wish, and all you get,
Is punishment for what ye forget.
`I loved that -- I don't know why. I don't fully comprehend it, and I can't explain how I'm interpreting it, but they're just mesmerizing.

The imagery that was illustrated in my mind while reading this was sooooo freaking complicated -- and yet so beautiful in a feiry, evil kind of way. I normally can't stand reading poems that are written in olde, but you kept my attention which is quite hard to do. It was refreshing, rare and quite debonair, I must say. Nice write, hon.

--..MiNDYY

Its great and i like how you start with questions to make us think before read and then we read to see what you need to say
flow nicely well done 5/5