The Breaking Point.

YOU HAVE TO REPLY TO THIS POST, MENTION WHICH POEMS YOU WANT IN THE COMMENT TO RECEIVE CREDIT, OR SEND ME A PRIVATE MESSAGE.

If you give me a good comment/reflection on any of my feature poems. I will gladly give you a critique and reflection of either your latest poem or one of your featured just specify in a reply to this, without buttering it up to spare you feelings. Your comment has to have substance to receive one in return though. Nothing like "Good poem I liked it."

You get what you put in. You take two minutes to write me a response I will give you something of equal value. You take 15 and you will get something of equal value, and yes I can tell :).

Poems I'd suggest:

If you like unique imagery/theme:
Death Led By A Seas**t Seductress
Rock, Paper, Scissors?

If your into passionate poetry:
Fire and Ice -- Alternate ending

or

Any of my latest few:
"Oh, Tired Eyes, Why Can't I forget"
"Dreamer's never really leave dreamland"
"Medicated with Moonshine, Looking for that Lunar Eclipse"

Examples of my comments so that you know it's worth the time:

"Wow, I don't even know where to begin with this poem. The theme was portrayed in a way that I just knocked me out of my seat. I think I������¢���¯���¿���½���¯���¿���½ll hit the critiques before I come with the praise so that it will be that much sweeter������¯���¯���¿���½���¯���¿���½. I feel like the vocabulary was too extravagant and seems slightly forced in this piece. I feel like if there were a few more common words the Imagery that you so excellently built would be easier to grasp. I know that in this type of poem with this type of theme the words tend to be ������¢���¯���¿���½���¯���¿���½divine������¢���¯���¿���½���¯���¿���½ if you will but I feel like it was taken too far, because I consider myself to have a pretty vast vocabulary and I was scratching my head at a few of the words because of their absence from common speech in every day slang and that there was so much of that, that when I came across words I didn������¢���¯���¿���½���¯���¿���½t understand, I was unable to take away a meaning for the word through context analysis without looking the word up.
Now for the good part, ������¯���¯���¿���½���¯���¿���½ I thought, by an extremely vast gap of interest, that your alliteration was by far the most impressive part of this poem. I would go as far as to say that it was magnificent, arresting, superb, and even as far as intimidating. Almost every line contained alliteration on multiple sounds of multiple letters which continuously blew my mind away, as I ventured across each new brilliant use of alliteration. My favorite example of this would have to be:
������¢���¯���¿���½���¯���¿���½Stanzas break, sketching fluttering words������¢���¯���¿���½���¯���¿���½
The alliteration hit������¢���¯���¿���½���¯���¿���½s so many sounds it������¢���¯���¿���½���¯���¿���½s breathtaking (s, r, t, n). Also despite, being hard to deduce at first, the imagery in this poem is also absolutely spectacular. It������¢���¯���¿���½���¯���¿���½s un-repetitive and each has its own original flare. Very well done!
-Alex"

"Very well written piece, the emotions you were portrayed convincingly and were evident throughout the entire piece. The flow was sustained pretty consistently from start to finish, other than a few lines where it seemed like it could do with a syllable or two less, despite the loose rhyme scheme. I loved the repetition used at the end of the verse three to give that extra umph to the image of your struggle.
The lines that stood out most to me were in verse 2:
"Take my heart. Match it beat for beat.
Let me faint into the darkness of night.
Let our footprints wash away in time."

The imagery here is exquisite and each line hit's with a different emotion making it absolutely intriguing. Well done!
-Alex

In regards to the questions you left in my poem:

Actually, Donnie Darko has been my favorite movie since I was 15 lol. In regards to the end, it all depends on what theme you take away from the poem. From my feedback on other sites: some people relate it to sibling abuse at a young age, some people take it as abuse from a significant other, and some as some deep evil entity in the mind. I didn't write the poem with the intention to match any particular one of these themes. I wrote it so that my reader would be able to interpret how he/she chooses to interpret. The poem is written is written from the first person point of view, but it isn't a first person poem in reality. It's not personal, just a message and a theme I wanted to display. The laughter is most feasibly taken away as the consummation of the narrators mind but it would be in respect to whichever theme you took away.
-Alex"

I commented on "Rock, Paper, Scissors?" and "Paradox So Sweet". Amazing poems, I truly enjoyed.

Can you please comment on my two latest "Remember The Enigma within Chimera's Eyes" and "Music Box"?

Thanks in advance :)

Commented and rated "Rock, Paper, Scissors?"

dont care what poem you pick.

I did "Rock, Paper, Scissors?" like everyone else.

I couldn't help iiit. I was just so curious. I really loved the title.

Please do: The Obligation of a Battered Soul"

Thanks much! :]

I did your new one, can you read my newest?

Okay I'm all caught up in response comments.

This is a continually standing offer so, anyone feel free to comment and post what you'd like to have critiqued/praised/reflected/analyzed and I'll get to it as soon as possible. I added some recommendations/preferred pieces to the original post.

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