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Your beauty steals my sense of fear away
True eyes, I gaze in, banishing the clock
I've not to fear a thing hurts you today

If waters raged, I'd cringe; and now I pray
We'll have those fearless mornings on your dock
Your beauty steals my sense of fear away

Still years and you have not a thing to say
Once broken, beaten, battered off the rock
I've not to fear a thing hurts you today

When lived so long, is all you see in grey?
Though, colors broke my own dismaying lock
Your beauty steals my sense of fear away

You've shown me to a path I'll freely stray
So now I couldn't think you're lost in walk
I've not to fear a thing hurts you today

Divine I may allege you, I am so gay
This wonder leaves me longing for your knock
Your beauty steals my sense of fear away
I've not to fear a thing hurts you today

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If my comment was good enough, go ahead and choose any 3 of mine

I will do that, thank you for your comment!

Done^_^
can you plz do 3 of my latest poem and plz dont forget to rate
thanks

Done :)

Please comment/rate:

* Ardent Waltz
* Concrete Clouds
* Lyrical Lies

Thanks in advance!

Will do, thank you for the awesome feedback.

Please read rate and comment on "Infatuation" in my featured poems and then "Dangerous Truth" and "What a mother shold be"

I left you a lengthy comment I'm sure you'll appreciate.

The three I'd like to see you comment on are "You and Me; The Sun Washed Out", "AMEN", and "One Sweet Day More". And if it's not too much, I'd like you to do them in that order.

I look forward to your comments.

Daniel Ray Mulvany