Need some advice, I will return the favor!

Hey Everyone!

I would really love some comments and advice on my latest poem:

~Story of our Love~

I will return the favor if you help me out! Thank You!

Done with pleasure. I'm waiting for your your poem no. 100.

Done:)
pls do my latest ... thanks dear(:

Well done... my advice to you is.

"keep writing, you have amazing potential"

read any of my poems

thx

I'm new so I only have one post and it's a story, not a poem, but I'd really appreciate some input. Criticism would be fantastic. And, of course, I'll return the favor.