Amy's poems :)

Please read the poems below and comment with your favourite one. You do not need to give a reason, and everyone can join in this.

Thank you xxx

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#1
Butterfly

A flutter of a butterfly's wing,
Is a simple manoeuvre
And yet takes all it's strength
To dance up and take flight..

A controlled journey
Of an angelic, skillful
Butterfly, seems a long
Painful drift along the turquoise sky.

How I yearn to be a
Crimson butterfly highlighted
With gold, and be adored
For all I am worth.

I want to flit about,
Without a care in the
World holding me down
And feel the wind beneath my wings.

A flutter of a butterfly's wing,
Is a simple manoeuvre
And yet takes all it's strength
To dance up and take flight..

I admire you dear, butterfly.
Cherish your freedom!

#2
Beautiful! (Acrostic).

Bright and loving,
Easy going and kind.
A wonderful person,
Usually a brilliant mind.
Terribly smart,
Intelligent and spirited.
Free as a bird,
Understanding and mostly riveted
Letting you know, your BEAUTIFUL!

#3
One Last Goodbye...

I look out the window.
The rain pouring down,
Tapping against the glass.
I think of you,
My silent tear drops appear.
I feel a warm touch,
Wishing it was you.
I hold on tight, not looking up.
I cry harder without a sound.
I look out the window,
The clouds burst with a ray of sun,
And I see you,
I wave and say one last goodbye.

It must be something about number #3 as I pick this one as my favourite. Number 1 is a good idea but I felt a few words were maybe out of place, and would have been suited better with other words in their place. But number #3 for me.

3 is much more revealing. The circumstances are vague enough to represent a lover who has left or a loved one who has died.

1 is very good as it views the flight of a butterfly as true exertion, but the middle part about wishing to be a butterfly is predictable. If you develop more on the butterfly's perspective it would be a great improvement.

2 "your" at the end should be "you're." I assume you wrote this in a birthday card to someone. Acrostics have the danger of being simply cute. It seems to me that the form should not prevent the poem from giving some depth of meaning to the reader, some wry twist that makes us think differently or some observation unusual and significant.

#3

I would also say number 3 Because of the smooth flow

I agree #3 is the best.

#1 is very beautiful, #2 is good and the most I liked is #3:)