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Hey, I've been a little off on my writing lately. Recently I posted a poem called "I'm In My Tears". Well, I was wondering if you guys could vote and comment on it so I can see what's wrong, if anything. If you do, I PROMISE I'll return the favor. Thank you so much!
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I just checked it out, pretty good.

I had a look. I liked it.

Hey ...I liked the poem..However i have a few suggestions for you. It doesn't flow easily...and it needs a little repair.. Definetly work on catchin the flow and following it through..and find a rhythm. You write great...but a little constructive criticism never killed anyone. Find how many syllabals are in each line, and follow the pattern. In that type of poetry, try having the same amount of syllabals per line..it'll make it easier :)

Hina