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  • Tiny Reader
    20 years ago

    Please can you read this and give me some comments on how to improve, and vote? I'd really appreciate it. Thanks in advance
    sarahxxxx

  • Tiny Reader
    20 years ago

    hehe I forgot to write the whole 'I'll return the favour n sh*t' haha. xxx

  • Natalie84
    20 years ago

    Okies dokes...read it...WONDERFUL!! :)

    Seriously...you don't need to improve it. It's perfect.

  • Brookeღ
    20 years ago

    Done! I didn't see where you needed to change a thing! Would you please take a look at any of my featured poems! Maybe not my lastest one it's not that good! Thanx I appreciate it!

  • Tiny Reader
    20 years ago

    Thanks for the comments! Oh yeah, and I got rid of the commas :) xxx

  • Britney
    20 years ago

    Hey.. well im going to go read it now. It doesnt matter which one you read.