Free Honest Crtiques from Music for the first 10 people

"Pretty Eyes Made For Crying" ...

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/dark/poems.php?id=751384

I just wrote this, and i need to improve it big time. Thanks darling. =D

either of my two latest poems, they were posted pretty recently and don't have any comments on them yet, honest critique is the best type so i'd appraciate it. thanks.

umm..im not sure if i've been on your previous post and if i have, im sorry...so you dont have to do mine...but if i haven't could you please do:
"Devils Grip"
Thankyou

I'm not positive i havent gotten a critique from you before but anyways..
lol. Less than 10 comments.... xD

could you please do-Self Esteem?

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/sad/poems.php?id=726966

thank you very much.. =]

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im in

I'm at War with a Joker

if you could please i wrote it as a song and im not sure if its very good or not

any critique is appreciated!