Ten Word Challenge!

I hereby challenge thee, poets, to maketh a very short poem, consisting of not more than 10 words!

Rules;
1. The poem may have a title of any length, but the poem itself must not be more than ten words long.
2. It must be your own work.
3. There are no more rules! =) Be imaginative!

You may reproduce your old work, but I doubt that many people have a poem that is < 10!

You may use a set form to your poem, but again I doubt that there are many that can be incorprated into this challenge :p

Prizes;
1st prize - a place on my favourites, and 5 r/r/cs
2nd prize - 5 r/r/cs
3rd prize - 3 r/r/cs

Everyone will get a free r/r/c when they enter for making the effort! =D And I'll comment on all the poems entered too, in this forum.

The competition will end on the 18th September...

So good luck and happy writings!

Imi
xXx

so it can be TEN words right...not like..9 or less..?

ok ill assume 10.

Broken.

Broken,
Fading into black,
Alone.
You are never
coming back.

wow all I's....geez

I'm just doing this to see if I could... I'm not sure if this works; tell me if it doesn't!

Innocent

No one,
Is born innocent;
For living,
Is our sin.

xDarkSuicidex

Heaven voices
Embedded with golden threads
Woven around my heart

If you were talking to me, Kevin --

Thank you very much. =]

xDarkSuicidex

Lost

Love embraced
by night
two hearts
fall out of sight

The silence

The silence
The peace
The love
this world doesn't have

Women

Saw your beauty
and died
Broke up with you
Reborn.

Simplicity

Envy, hatred,
sadness, greed?
Love and laughter's,
all we need.

This is how I feel about my beautiful little daughter.

Oh my child!

Mother and daughter
Quarks spin, merge, return
Two are blended

Fire [Lanturne]
by ♥ .J.є.ѕ.ѕ.у. ♥

......Hot......
..Flames lick..
.Bringing heat.
..To our icy..
.....Lives....
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Lanturne:
A type of poetry in which when it is centered, it resembles the Japanese lantern.
It has a strict syllable pattern of 1, 2, 3, 4, 1.

Lol its not good but here is mine

~Down side of Winter~

Wet...
Cold...
Frost that
Nips at your
Red running nose

What?

What were you thinking of
when you chose me, Love?

"Love"
By: ~Flying High~

Broken Hearts, Bleeding eyes
Love is her only crime!

to answer your question, it can be 10 words or less :) the ones i've read so far are really good! keep it up guys!

Ok, I'm going to start commenting on these poems now, but more are very welcome! Firstly, Bri...

------Trust
----Vanished
---With deceit
--Fading away
------Lies

This is a very good poem. The begining 3 lines are a very good opening, but I'm not so sure about the 4th line, 'fading away'; it almost seems a bit of a contrast with 'vanished'. However all in all a great poem with much said in the few words allowed; infact you did it in 7 :O! Congratulations!

Imi
xXx

Who Cares? -

Broken,
Fading into black,
Alone.
You are never
coming back.

Well done for the rhyme! That's a very hard thing to establish in such a short poem! The subject you chose is good and it starts well. I don't think that 'you are never coming back' is the best way to say what you want in those last too lines... I think it's a bit TOO direct for poetry. But overall well done another great poem =)

Imi
xXx

Inexcusable
Intolerant intentions initiates injustice,
Indeed,
It insures insidious injuries inevitably.

Kevin, I just love the alliteration in this poem! It really adds something new and fresh. And what's more, it makes actual sense as a poem! =O! The use of only words beginning with 'i' is original and clever, I really like this poem! Eventhe title begins with 'i'! My only problem with it is that the actual co ntent of the poem is no spectacular, but it does make sense and all in all this is an amazingly clever and quirky poem! Well done Kevin :)

Imi
xXx

No one,
Is born innocent;
For living,
Is our sin.

xDarkSuicidex, this is a really super poem. It's a bit quote-like, but i supose that can't be helped with such a short poem! It's clever and has a meaing, which I admire. It states what it wants to say quite obviously, but again it is difficult not to do this with a poem of this length. =) Altogether it's a brilliant specimen of a 10 word poem! All it's really lacking is a title :p

Imi
xXx

Heaven voices
Embedded with golden threads
Woven around my heart

Noni, this poem is very promising and shows some real talent :) The imagery that you create with this poem is fantastic. It's a well written piece, with good choice of words to describe your thoughts. However it is missing some punctuation and again, a title, but overall, super poem. Well done!

Imi
xXx

Lost

Love embraced
by night
two hearts
fall out of sight

Well done 'crazyandsweet', this poem's really good! I don't normally like romantic poems as i find them a bit soppy, but I don't think this one is long enough to make me resent it for that reason, which is a good thing! It's simple, as short poems gently have to be, but I think you get quite a lot across in those few words. The title also helps and I think that it complete's the poem. I like the fact that you have used rhyme in your poem, as I think this is hard to do; however I'm not too keen on the last line, and I think this poems needs some puntctuation to carry it through. But altogether, not a bad poem :)

Imi
xXx

By the way, I've just noticed that Bryan has entered 2 poems, and as I said nothing against this in the rules, I think this is fine! You can enter as many as you like, as long as, if I have marked yours, you do not resubmit the same poem with changes ;)

Imi
xXx

Life (Lanturne)
by ღ»Lσιѕ«ღ

----------Life
--------Helped
-----Start Our New
------Established
---------Love

Already

---They say
-"If" the world
----fell apart.
--It already has.

---Never said
-I wanted to know
---what's inside
----your head

............beautiful day.
...............sunshine,
...........without the rain.
.................loving
...........without the pain.

lol that's my attempted. It harder than u think, only using 10 words. Yours are all fab :)

phoebz xoXoxOo

....Heaven...
..Torn Away...
By threads of deceit
Created...by...me

Noni, this is a good poem which shows promise. You say a lot in just ten words, but it's very similar to the other poem which you submitted, which is a shame, as an original approach might have worked better. I prefer your other poem, but tis one's good too! =)

Imi
xXx

Whats Left Of Me
Bryan

My love
for her
has destroyed
whats left
of me!

Bryan, this is quite a good poem but I think it's ruined somewhat by the exclamation mark at the end, which changes to tone to humour, which doesn't suit this poem. I realise it's hard to write in 10 words and overall it's a good poem :)

Imi
xXx

Scarlet Rain [Lanturne]
by ♥ .J.є.ѕ.ѕ.у. ♥

......Blood......
....Drips fast....
...Slowly falls...
Like scarlet rain
.....Splash.....
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Lanturne:
A type of poetry in which when it is centered, it resembles the Japanese lantern.
It has a strict syllable pattern of 1, 2, 3, 4, 1.

The silence

The silence
The peace
The love
this world doesn't have

This is a brilliant and meaningful poem, 'wings of an angel'. It is simple but effective and makes quite a statement about the world with those 10 words. The 'peace' and 'love' lines are good but I'm not so sure about the 'silence'. However, all things considered this is a great 10 word write. Well done! =D

Imi
xXx

Women

Saw your beauty
and died
Broke up with you
Reborn.

Super poem Oscar! I had to read it a couple of times to get the gist of it, but it's very good and clever. I think the title might be better as 'Woman' and it needs some punctuation to break it up and make it easier to understand, but altogether not a bad piece of writing. :)

Imi
xXx

Simplicity

Envy, hatred,
sadness, greed?
Love and laughter's,
all we need.

This is a good, happy poem, which makes a contrast with most of the posts so far in this contest! I love the rhyme and I think the title fits the poem superbly. You have used your allowed ten words to great effect, creating this poem; congratulations! =)

Imi
xXx

Oh my child!

Mother and daughter
Quarks spin, merge, return
Two are blended

I like the way you've written about your child, as I think the best poems come from the heart. It's a good poem, with great use of language. The only word I'm not sure about is blended; it reminds me of a food blender! Maybe it would be better to use merged here and replace the merge with blend; but overall it works well and expresses you and your daughter's intimate realationship very well.

Imi
xXx

Sporadic Cries [Lanturne]
by κяıѕτєи ღ κѕ4є

-------Lost
------Spirits
---Falling Down
----Vehemently
--------Cry

I love this poem Kristen, it's very well written and your choice of words is excellant. I like the way that you have used a 'lanturne' form to you poem as this works well. You have a good vocablury and show talent in this poem. Well done! =)

Imi
xXx

Fire [Lanturne]
by ♥ .J.є.ѕ.ѕ.у. ♥

......Hot......
..Flames lick..
.Bringing heat.
..To our icy..
.....Lives....

This is another great poem [how am I going to choose?! :S] Use also use the lanturne form well and this poem is superb and works well. It is interesting and shows talent. I like it! :D

Imi
xXx

~Down side of Winter~

Wet...
Cold...
Frost that
Nips at your
Red running nose

Well, it's not bad! I like the fact that it's more light-heated than other enteries, and the way you describe 'the downside of winter'. The title's not great, but it's needed to hold the poem together. It's not the bestpoem I've ever written, but it's certainately not the worst! And not bad for 10 words! =)

Imi
xXx

What?

What were you thinking of
when you chose me, Love?

This doesn't jump out at me as a great poem. It's a bit bumpy, and the Love doesn't fit in. It's more like a sentance than a poem. Sorry! :)

Imi
xXx

Please

...........Under
.........The pale
......Moon light lets
..dance one more time
..........Please.

This is a good poem Bryan, and it shows talent. I prefer it a lot to the other piece you submitted as it has more depth and shows you skills to a better extent. It needs a comma after the 'moonlight', but apart from that, a pretty good poem. :)

Imi
xXx