Ill do 2 of your.

  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Hey all,
    Could anyone please comment/rate on "The girl you dont see (Burning)"? Ill do 2 of yours A.S.A.P. Just tell me which ones.

    Thanks in advance.

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  • just a little girl
    19 years ago

    heya can you do,
    doll
    conversation of a suicide and her friend

    and im off to look at yours :D

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  • ASPHYXIATED
    19 years ago

    Done Yours M'dear.
    Please Do ;
    •Her Pretty Box & True Lovers Never Part.

    =)

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Thanks you both! Ive done all of the poems you left. Thanks for commenting on mine. All 4 poems were really great!! Enjoyed reading them.

    Anyone else??

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  • Becky
    19 years ago

    hey yopur poem was great if you could do Take 1 and for the last time, that would be great, thanxe

    lots of love
    *~*becky*~*

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Becky done. Wow!! There both great!! Keep it up! xx

    Anyone else??

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Anyone? Im bored, i wanna comment on sammat.

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  • Idiosyncratic
    19 years ago

    Please do Misery and Suicidal Sacrifice.

    Thanks!

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  • LadyPearl
    19 years ago

    Pointing Finger
    Fleeing camps

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  • Misstress
    19 years ago

    -Untitled#-
    -Changing Lanes-

    thanks.

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Erica ive done ours! They were excellent!

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    MY1&only: Done. Keep the great work up! xx

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  • Bret Higgins
    19 years ago

    oops, {edit}

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Noni Wang©:

    Ive done, Pointing Finger. Ive allready commented on "Fleeing camps" So give me another name of a poem and ill do it for you. Thanks for commenting. I love your poems!!!

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Misstress done! Great reads! Keep it up!

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Bret Higgins:

    Huh? "oops, {edit}"?? What on earth?

    Anyone else??

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Fetusboy: Done. Really enjoyued reading both of those poems.

    Anyone else?

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Anyone??

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Ok i did:
    Love Long Forbidden
    Debbie?

    Because they had less comments! Great reads!!

    Anyone else??

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  • Natalie
    19 years ago

    Done! I seriously loved it. ;P

    If you could please do "Resolute Soul" and "Chaotic" that would be great! Thanks!

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Done! Great reads!! Ive added you to my faves because i liked them so much! Keep them up and thanks for your comment! :)

    Anyone else?

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  • Bret Higgins
    19 years ago

    I posted in the wrong thread, F A.

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Oh right

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  • Bret Higgins
    19 years ago

    OK, read and commented, don't think you'll like it though. More than happy to discuss if you like.

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Lol Thanks for the honesty.
    How can i improve?

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  • Bret Higgins
    19 years ago

    Let read a couple more of your poems to get a feel for your style and I'll be right back.

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  • Bret Higgins
    19 years ago

    OK, you're telling us your thoughts and ideals, not showing them.

    For this poem:

    Get creative and descriptive, show me the embers in the cigarette, let me hear the sizzle as the cherry meets skin, let me smell the sulphur as the cigarette burns the hair on your arm that rise in little screams of release.

    Know what I mean?

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  • Bret Higgins
    19 years ago

    Remember that I may say something negative about your poem (and everyone elses for that matter) but I'll always be there to help you improve too.

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  • Simple Sensation
    19 years ago

    Hmmm... Thanks. Ill try and redo it, and ill post my new version up. I dont mind you giveing me a bad comment itll help me improve. :)

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  • Bret Higgins
    19 years ago

    cool beans

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