New poem! [1-2]

  • ForeverYoung
    19 years ago

    Done!
    Could you please do

    -Tortured mind
    -Forever And Always

    Thanks
    Much Love

    ~Murder.

  • Jessica
    19 years ago

    There you go, could you do my latest two please? Thankss, xx.

  • Jenni Marie
    19 years ago

    Done.

    Could you please do
    *I Fell For You
    *I'll be with you.

    Thanks
    xx

  • BlueDreams
    19 years ago

    any of mine i really appreciate, thanks.

    bert ~

  • Anonymous
    19 years ago

    Done. Great poem.

    Could you do

    * Let's Do the Atom Bomb Dance
    * I Like To Crush Dreams.

    Thanks. :]

  • kamal
    19 years ago

    Hello Debbie
    I have done your poem 'It Wasn't For Me...'it is quite visual...
    I would like to request ranking, commenting, criticising my poem 'Dew drops', if possible...
    Thankyou!

  • kamal
    19 years ago

    Thankyou Debbie for the comments. I found it quite constructive. I really need such comments to get a better understanding of my style and how it can get better.
    Thankyou again Debbie. I would always appreciate your comments, ranking and criticism on any of my poems. I invite you and humbly request for the remarks.
    I will surely return the favour.
    Kamal

  • kamal
    19 years ago

    Hello Debbie,
    Thankyou again for commenting/rating/crticising my poems. I definitely need them. I have been writing a lot on my feelings and not on topics. However, that is the reason i am on this site- to be able to learn and grow on my writing.

    As such, all sorts of comments are always going to help me.

    You are righ! My stanzas need improvement. I also would need to have major improvements on punctuation. Also, I would probably need to clarify the topic to the reader rather than just expressing the feelings in my own world.

    Excellent feedback from you Debbie! I would appreciate more feedback from you any time. I will also rate and comment your poems as well. As you request, I will definitely be honest and open. However, they would be my perspective and would probably be amateur one.

    Thanks again Debbie!
    Kamal