contest about death!!

ok here's the deal....enter any poem about death to see if you really have enough talent to win this contest.
here are the rules:

*must be about death(of course)
*must be atleast 15 lines long
*must ryhme
*it can be a new poem or an old one
*has to be your own original work

the due date is Jan.27,2007
here are the prizes:

*1st place = 15comments/votes and added to my favorites.

*2nd place=10 comments/votes and added to my favorites

*3rd place= 5 comments and votes

*everyone else that entered= 2 comments and votes

ok...good luck everyone!

~michelle~

does suicide count?

yes anything that has to do with death.

What Were You Thinking?!

What were you thinking when you did what you did?
What was going through your mind?
Did you think about the ones that you just left behind?
Did it ever occur to you that we cared about you?
Did you seriously think it wouldn't hurt us?
Why did you leave without a single goodbye?
What was this supposed to solve?
Were you thinking it wouldn't hurt us if you were the one jumping?
Are we just supposed to forget about you?
Why did you do this to us?
What the hell were you thinking when you jumped off that bridge?

*hope you like it*
Forever*Yours

Here's an interesting twist to your contest... it is about death... just not what you were probably thinking... Hope it's okay! =]

Dead Of A Heartbreak / How Can You Still Call Me Beautiful

With yesterday’s make-up
Smeared across her face
She shies away
From his loving embrace

“What’s wrong?” he asks
“Nothing, why?” she replies
“I just want to know why
Your make-up’s smeared under your eyes.”

“Oh, it’s nothing, don’t worry.
I’ll be alright.”
“No really, what’s wrong?”
What happened last night?”

She tries hard not to break down
Right in front of him
Her soul is shattered again
She tries to push the pain within

“You know I care, please tell me.”
“Don’t worry, I’ll be fine.”
“No you’re not, you’re not okay
You’re feeding me a line.”

“If I were to talk to you
Would you really care?
After it’s all done,
Would you still be standing there?”

“Oh, honey! You know I do.
Why wouldn’t I be?
When ever have I not been?
It’s alright, you can tell me.”

“I love this boy, but he doesn’t care…”
“Are you sure about that?”
“I’m pretty sure; he never did.”
“Now, why would you say that?”

“Well, he lives too far away
He used to live near me
And we rarely talk anymore
It’s hard to deal with really.”

“Who was this boys?
Where has he gone?”
“No, I can’t tell you
My feelings are wrong.

He has robbed me of my beauty
Stole it from within
When I stopped seeing this boy
He took it away with him.”

“You know, I think you’re lying
Because you know I can tell
That looking through your eyes
You can see you’ve gone through hell.

You’ve been robbed of something, yes
But not what you speak of
Your beauty and grace are still there
So is your kindness and love.”

“How can you still call me beautiful
While I’m standing here a mess
My face looks so horrible
Plus, this torn and tattered dress?”

“Baby, you shine from within
Your beauty glows and shows
I can see past the make-up
To see the real eyes, lips, and nose.”

“You’re just saying that because you have to
Because you’re just trying to be nice
But this is too much to deal with
I can’t let this happen twice.”

“Sweetie stop…I love you dearly
You know this much is true.
I have always been there for you
And I really truly do.”

As she stood there stunned
Her knees began to shake
As she fell down to the floor
Her whole body began to quake

As he bent to pick her up
He noticed something wrong
Her eyes were staring upwards
Her gaze fixed just too long

He held his dying baby
As she slowly slipped away
“I love you and want to marry you…
I was going to propose Valentine’s Day.”

Through her last moments of life
She tried to tell him, with pain
That he was the boy she loved so dearly
But her efforts were in vain

Her body limping, without a soul
For as she slipped out of life
Her one last dream that couldn’t come true
Was just to be his wife

As her love held her body
That had once been so full
He whispered softly in her ear
“How could I not call you beautiful?”

After her funeral the very next day
The boy broke down and cried
She was his everything in his life
He didn’t want her to die

So as the boy walked home
A dove flew over his head
As he watched it silently
He remembered what she said

And as the boy looked down
To walk to his home
He thought he felt something funny
It’s origin, unknown

Then he saw it shining
Lying on the ground
Her favorite golden necklace
That he just had found

He wondered how it got there
But somehow, it led him home
Then he finally realized
That she had already known

She knew he loved her dearly
Of course she knew that was true
But he never even told her
“Baby, I really love you.”

As he sat upon his couch
The boy felt such an ache
His friends found him the next day
Dead of a heartbreak.

♣ Lucky ♣

I hope you like it...I wrote it after my Uncle died.

"Dale"

You were gone too soon
You're too far away
You can't make me smile
Or come over and play

I'm lost without you
Come hold my hand
Lead me along
I'll follow you to the end

I need your stories
I crave your laugh
I can't bare to think
That time was your last

Your face is fading
In my mind
Can't you smile
Just one last time?

Your heart beat
Pounding so loud
Let me get closer
To drown out the sound

You were gone too soon
You're too far away
you can't make me smile
Or come over and play

A tear blurs my sight
A shiver runs through me
My heart shatters
Deep down inside me

The sweet music you sang
I play again and again
Your talent was matchless
We can only pretend

Under your fingers
The piano was grand
A heart could be warmed
By one touch of your hand

You were gone too soon
You're too far away
You can't make me laugh
Or come over and play

wow these three are really good...you people have alot of work ahead of you if you wanna beat these 3....come on .....anyone?

Under the unfluence
by Becca ♥

Under the influence
that’s where he hides
Away from reality
He's trying to die

He's trying to leave
It hurts me so bad
If only he knew
All that he had

He stumbles and falls
And he makes me cry
He Makes me wish
That I could die

But I cannot
Just fade away
I need to live
I need to stay

Up tireing nights
Waiting for him
just so I
can tuck him in

I love him so much
But he is not real
Too intoxicated
and too numb to feel

he is so mean
And he yells real loud
He laughs as he painfully
Pushes me down

& under the influence
that's where he hides
where he was lost
and where daddy died

wow!! this one is good 2...

Last Breath

The finale has come, the end is here,
No one scream, and do not fear.
The ending of me will go out with a bang,
Everyone will remember the words I sang.

Yesterday has passed, tomorrow will not come,
Do not cry as the sad songs are hummed.
This is the end. This is my last breath.
I have brought upon my silent death.

Took a razor, put it to my skin,
Finally committed my final sin.
Wrote a note in the blood that did pour,
Aware that there will be no future in store.

This is the finale, yesterday is passed,
I was always bullied, and picked last.
This is the end. This is my last breath.
I have brought upon my own silent death.

~*W.C?*~
yeah...hope this is ok. not my best..but i cant write sad poems nemore lately so i had to look 4 one so yeah lemme know if its ok or not:)

yea i thought it was great...this is gonna be a tough decision.

I hope you like this.. It's controversial [it's about being gay and someone killing one of them...] but I hope you enjoy it.
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My Enemy.

My lover stands in front of me;
My lover is my enemy.
Our love all seemed to make sense,
But our lies were our only defense.

Two lovers; we're plain to see,
Are simply two that are meant to be.
But of two who feel so much devotion,
There is very much commotion.

Walking alone the streets one day,
Holding hands, people look in dismay.
A smile on our faces; we hold on tight,
For we won't give up with frightening fight.

Bang, bang; a gun is heard,
And suddenly it all seems absurd.
Holding my love tight in my arms,
Pray can I to take her from harm...
But now it's my turn to look up and say,
'God, why are you being this way!
Out of discrimination, out of hate,
Was this really our final fate?'

I fall to the ground, no longer can I stand,
As I take her head within my hands;
Pulling her close and glare at the sky,
As a tear falls gently from my eyes,
I look up and ask the very sky,
'Did anyone else see this woman die?'

A young woman came to me then,
A display of love, a display of no sin,
And in her sweet smelling arms she took me,
To tell me that my love could now be free;
I closed my eyes and finally cried,
Because of that night, my one and only died.

Our love all seemed to make sense,
But our lies were our only defense.
My lover stands no longer in front of me,
My lover was my soul enemy.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Hope this works. If not. Too Bad. its about death

Its Murder..

When you go to work each day
Do you listen for the cries?
Do you hear the silent screams they make,
Everytime they die?

When you kill those innocent children,
Do you consider their holy souls?
Do you wonder what they could've done,
If they had a chance to accomplish their goals?

You say they're only flesh,
Only muscle skin and bone.
But they could have been someone
If they had the chance to grow.

Remember that little one you killed today?
He could've been the new pope.
He could've changed the way the world works.
But thats something we'll never know.

That little boy could have found the cure,
To cancer, AIDS or more.
He could have saved a million lives,
He could have ended all Wars.

When you stop their hearts from beating
Do you think of what you've done?
Its just as though you've shot a child,
With a legal machine gun.

Before you kill those innocent kids.
Think of how you're such a fool
The government's tricked you into thinking
That this murder isn't cruel....

xXxX Lauren

really great poems....anyone else?

lol, i was just gonna put one in, i got all excited and everything, then i saw that i already entered one... and now im laughing hahaha, i feel blonde...

Death is here

By:David Marshall

Here I come,
here to die.
Here I come,
here I cry.

What to do,
what to feel.
What to do,
what is real.

Where to go,
where to see.
Where to go,
where I'll be.

Death is here,
torn in fear.
Death is here,
one more tear.

Set me free,
right here and now.
Set me free,
from misery.

Release my pain,
end it now.
release my pain,
to death I bow.

Cut me loose,
break the chain.
Cut me loose,
stop this pain.

Burn in hell,
for what you did.
Thanks to you,
now I'm dead.

I hope your happy,
I'm on the ground.
I hope your happy,
silent, no sound.

I hope you realize,
what you've done.
It was quick and painless,
at least with that gun.

Look at the blood,
it spills your regret.
You screwed up my life,
don't ever forget.

Deep in my sorrow,
was someone who cared.
Deep in my sorrow,
was love I shared.

Deep in my heart,
was a place for you.
Before I could start,
my despair just grew.

Now that I'm gone,
the pain is no more.
I found a way out,
so I opened the door.

In my grave,
still I cry.
Carved on my grave,
I say goodbye.

I hope this is okay, if not... meh, i wrote it tonight, and it's about death. sooo... there it be. Good Luck All

"Regret Me Not"

Regret me not blues,
Regret me not reds,
Regret me not purples,
Regret not I'm dead.

Regret not my passing,
I am now at rest
It's not such a loss,
Regret not my death,

Regret not my leaving,
I disliked this life,
It wasn't for me,
Regret not this night.

Regret not my choosing,
To end this life here,
It wasn't you're fault,
Regret not my tears.

Regret me not, All,
Regret me not please,
Regret me not ever,
Regret not in dreams.

Black Eyes Watching

Black eyes scrutinizing without resonance
Staring cruelly; never tolerating one wince

Wondering just what I'm up to this night
Lustily hoping my actions are out of fright

I am their most favored emotional disaster
Reading my future eagerly; chapter by chapter

Controlled by the tension of holding too taut
Wallowing in the lagoon of being distraught

Thought and affliction pain my troubled mind
Out of concrete loathing does my jaw grind

The cool hand of sorrow eases the anticipation
Feeding my hungry ears a sadistic incantation

Encouraging deceit and deliberate disruption
Pouncing on the slightest palm of corruption

This wrinkled heart is not getting any younger
And the pits of my stomach boil from hunger

My book has come to an end I must confide
Hollow black eyes watch as I commit suicide

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Wrote this a while ago, not my best, but hopefully it will suffice :)

If this is not enough about 'death,' let me know. I will withdraw from the contest at your command ;)

On your deathbed
By; Poonam

When you stop and stand there
at the joining of the two roads,
think back upon your history
and the path that you have taken

When you are on your death bed,
what will run through your mind?
will you fear the unknown world
or rejoice the coming journey?

has your life rested upon one
disaster after painful another?
has misconception tore you
from the beings that surround you?

Or have you looked on the length of life
and chosen pathways filled with joy,
with pain, yet always worth the trip.
have you helped mankind, or helped destroy it?

now as you look on darkness, the light fading
remember what you are worth and choose
whether or not to fear the coming journey
and the rest of all eternity

foreveryours...you may enter more than one poem if you want....but the limit is 2 poems per person.. good luck people!

Tear Of My Heart

I know you don't love me
As I'm really sure
When I'm saying this to you
You will just be bored

I know you don't care about me
maybe this was all i needed
But it's just my secret
That you have been cheated

Take off your gun and pull it to my head
This would be less painful for me and
You'll have much regret
Shoot me no way I'll be dead for sure
But my heart will cry for the last time
And it'll scream your name
Then I'll be gone...

wow these poems are really good...its gonna be a hard decision so i think im going to end this contest on January 24 instead of the 27th..if anyone thinks they still need some time juss let me know and i might extend the due date..thanx everyone.

~michelle~

o0o we can enter two! yay! lol I have another one!

Signed A Crimson Red

Letters written by a bloodied hand
Hoping that someday you'll understand
Knowing it's not right, but it's okay
Knowing I'm gonna die this fateful day
Look at the pain in my eyes
Maybe then you'll realize
You're killing me so slowly
Why did you have to do this to me
All I ever did was love you
But your love was never true
So I'm finishing this letter
In hopes it willl make it better
When you read this I'll be gone and dead
So I'll sign this in a crimson red
With my last breath I will apologize
Now you will really see the pain in my eyes
I hope you will finally see
Just how much you really mean to me

♣ Lucky ♣

My Last Breath

Feels only like yesterday you were smiling at me
Doing nothing but singing of sweet dreams
Just being the perfect person, my only friend
I never dreamed I'd never see you again
Never imagined I'd get that call
The call that destroyed it all
When she said her son had died
All I could do was lay down and cry
Now I've only pictures of you to see
I wish you knew what you mean to me
Every night to the Lord I pray
That when in heaven, I'll be able to say
What you mean to me my friend
My soul will love you to the end
You were there for me through and through
And for that, I'll forever adore you
Now, as I begin to breathe my last breath
I dream of my happiness only in death

Without You

You were crowding me out
I needed my space
I pushed you aside
Into second place

You left me alone
And now I can breathe
There's time in life
That is all for me

But now that you're gone
I feel all alone
I had no idea
It would hurt when you'd go

I'm dying inside
I need you still
But you're long gone
And life's lost it's thrill

I got you back
For a short while
But you were ill
And died with a smile

I'm losing my mind
I miss you more
I just got you back
But you're gone like before

And now that you're gone
I feel all alone
I had no idea
It'd hurt this much when you'd go

I'm dying inside
I need you still
But you're long gone
And life's lost it's thrill

But I know you
And what you would say
So I push myself
To get on with my days

And even though
I still think of you
I'm learning to live
And how to really pull through

By: Charisma*

Title: The distance between us
Genre: Dark
By: Mark

Familiar you seem
in the dust of light
so long distance
though still in my sight

my self centered mind
binds me to the ground
can't move, can't reach you
my mind and my body is bound

Running in circles
out of order
my way is gone
around me disorder

sounds scared
sounds mad
feeling anger
feeling sad

Familiar you seem
in the dust of light
so long distance
unwrapped I might

getting behind
distance now too long
I have no chance
for remembering our song

the song of faith and destiny
sadness is here
giving up
cause the other road is full of fear

Distance in the new road
is only one breath
though not a better road
the road for my own painful death

Suicide Cry

Cremated senses, I burn
Awaiting the fiery unknown
Reason thinning like gossamer
On which the breakage is enthroned

Pieces of me drip from the sky
Into scarlet crevices of shame
Where punishment's flames never die
A ceaseless mockery of pain

Life, vital, to the funeral
Vernal sounds become my requiem
The Reaper of Truth himself
Buries my dying "Carpe Diem"

No more tears of shattered sound
Now, in my abyss, do I pray
To sink far beneath hollowed ground
If only "Deo Volente"

These Porcelain Tears
Bryan

The sun sets on her Porcelain Face,
tears roll down her cheeks in such disgrace.
For a love that was forgotten, no one really cares,
the pain she shows is too much for her to bare.

Writing her final note, no one around to see,
what she's been through, how hard life can be.
So she sits on her bed, with a pen and some paper,
waiting on her Prince Charming to come and save her.

She writes down her feelings, each and every day,
hoping her true love will come and take her pain away.
Wait as she might, her Prince Charming never shows,
writing down her feelings, but the torture never goes.

So she swallows the pills, lays the bottle by the bed,
and finishes writing her note, this is what it said,
"If my Prince Charming finds this, don't have any fear,
I will die here now with these Porcelain Tears."

Bryan Hunt © 2006

Second Entry:

Broken December
by Sociopathetic [Lauren]

Echoing ever so softly,
snow falls to the ground
whispers, whispers, whispers.
concealing the lies they surround

December, my truest love,
what ever have I done?
poor freshly fallen, virgin snow,
soiled by the crimson blood.

My lovely, cold, chilling Winter's night.
I never meant to grant you such pain.
I know , I knew the events of that night,
could've happened during a night of rain.

Freshly fallen pure red snow
I regret what I have done to you,
I would give anything I never had
to bleach back your sparkling hue

Now I sit, forever locked indoors,
Never to feel your frigid wind
I've broken you, my lovely December..
I've killed you with one wretched sin

Sitting by the open fire
Yet forever chilled to the bone.
December, my only love,
Death is now what I condone

Xx The Long Goodbye xX

I've known for a while that the end is near
Everybody has tried to make that very clear
It seems nowadays all I seem to do is cry
Torturing myself during this long goodbye

I don't want to see you in this pain anymore
It's killing me slowly, much worse than before
Because now I know there's nothing I can do
I hope I have the strength to get me through

You're the woman who brought me up from a child
When I was low, it was your number I dialled
But now you're being taken away from me
Leaving me alone to sift through the debris

Life is so unfair, taking you away so soon
I need you more than the stars and the moon
But it feels like I'm swimming up against the tide
I love you so much Nan, I need you by my side

But I don't want to see you live like this
So with one last 'I love you' and a goodbye kiss
I'll miss you so much but I just want you to know
I love you Nanna... and it's ok to let go ©

*Gem*

Hmm, I'm probably not going to win, lol, but here:

Kiss on the Cheek

Crimson tears drip
Time will slowly slip
Passing me on by
No more room to lie

Knife gouges deep
Mascara tears weep
Pale face dripping
Sanity now slipping

Kiss on the cheek
Life now will leak
From wounds here
Cold and bitter fear

Breath slows down
Darkness will crown
Princess of no one
For; now all alone

Heart tears in two
Pain slicing through
Screaming is heard
But never say a word

My Guardian Angel

I stand here protected, as one guarded child.
I sit alone safely, where nothing is wild.
Never been in danger, never in harm's way.
and all of life's challenges, waited at bay.

i have always been happy, for I've never felt pain.
my angel stands by me through sun snow and rain.
she is always smiling. and a smile she receives.
she tricks enemies away, or is it me she deceives?

I have always been guarded, and so never in fear.
and I stay locked up always, year after year.
have not seen a human, for she said they are bad
and even though i am healthy, i remain sad.

have i been missing out, is there much more to life,
could i someday have children and maybe a wife?
I must see it for myself, no longer can i wait.
i must be fragile, for fear is a human trait.

i wanted the experience, yet she locked me in.
i tried to run away, but she will always win.
I'm stuck here forever, i cry through the night.
and for the first time ever, i am feeling fright.

so long's gone by now, i still am stuck here.
i now cry every night, for real life is so near.
but here i shall stay, until my final breath.
so is she My Guardian Angel, or my Angel of Death.

"A Tale of a Schizofrenic Girl"
by The Angel of Secrets

A dark room full of unknown shadows,
broken glass lying on the floor.
There she sat all alone,
locked away behind a door.

Pain that poars through her veins,
as the tears run down her face.
Abandoned she sits in the cold,
with the wind as her only embrace.

The darkness lies around her,
and the shadows whisper near.
They talk to her in a kind voice,
"Don't worry, feel no fear."

She wish they would just go away,
leave, and never return.
Because of voices, she caused them pain,
With a heart in flames, that burn.

How she could hurt the ones she love?
The shadows say she's to blame.
"Now that you did everything wrong,
nothing will be the same."

She wants to scream, she wants to shout,
but her voice has flown away.
She raises up, and opens her mouth,
but she have no words to say.

"It is no use, you will obey,
Don't fight no more, don't fight."
The shadows come closer and closer now,
And the wind howls in the night.

"You know what you have to do,
you know it's the only way.
Do you want to live like this?
With darkness in every day?"

She wants to run, but her feet won't listen,
and they make her turn around.
She walks toward the broken window.
And looks down to the ground.

Her lips form a single word,
"No," is what she says.
The sound isn't hearable,
and all she hears is "Yes"

She feels the darkness come around her,
the tears run down her cheek.
She thought she could handle it, all alone,
but she was way to weak.

The shadows push her out the window,
and for a second, she swore she could fly.
Another word comes to her head,
the final word "Goodbye."

Too Young (In Memory of Sharon)
by ∫Bëløveđ∫

Too Young

That sweet little darling
Was too young to die

Her name was Sharon
And deep inside
Was the only place
She had to hide

I wonder if
In heaven above
She ever knew
That she was loved

I never knew
That saying goodbye
Could hurt so much
And make people cry

I just want to say
That maybe she should have
Waited a couple of years
To just be loved

She was too young to die;
It's a sad goodbye
I'm sorry that
She had to cry

Goodbye, Sharon
We loved you so
So much more
Than you'll ever know

You were too young;
A song never sung
You couldn't hold on
Just for that long

Goodbye, Sharon
You were a dear
Goodbye to you
And hello to the tears

You were too young
A song never sung...
A beautiful guitar
With strings never strung

Forever you're loved
In heaven above

^ If anyone would like to pay their respects to Sharon, you can post your condolences (sp).

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/discussion/topic.html?topic_id=70330

can we submit a poem about the death of a cat?

uhm...sure why not.

everyone i have an IMPORTANT announcement! there may be a delay on this contest because my grandma is in the hospital and i dont know when i can get back on here...i will try 2 get on here tomorrow....and i promise i will select a winner as soon as possible...but remember there is still one day left! so hurry.

omg, im so sorry about your grandma...

Yes, I am sorry to hear as well :( No worries about voting by the way, whenever things are stable at home and you have the time. No rush.

Take Care!

-Storm