Constructive Criticism

I'm offering constructive criticism (suggestions and opinions on work involving positive and negitive comments) to anyone who wants it.
It doesn't mean harsh disrespect of your work, just opinions of strengths and weaknesses in your poem/s.
It may help you to improve...
If this sounds good to you, leave up to three titles below and I'll leave you some CC.

If I've already left CC on the titles you requested, and you would like me to look at other writes, please feel free to leave more titles.

I originally said only a couple in case I got an overwhelming response (though I'm realising now that won't happen).

In return if you feel the need to stop by my poems and offer some CC, I would be more than grateful (it would be nice but isn't a must).

I would appreciate it if you don't ask me to CC any poem that was written purely for emotional purposes, as I will be honest on every poem even if it is very sad and oh so true.
Thanks.

http://www.best-love-poems.com/poems.php?id=779528

thanks

-Innocence

-Crimson Artworks

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/sad/poems.php?id=799874

If you would.

Thank you darling.

â—„Laurenâ–º

Anyone else?

Heart Unchained and The Non Believer if you still can, thank you!

Sure....

...all done.

anybody else interested?

Loving You (Part 1)

Thank you, Joe

Thanks.

Any of mine please i've just recently started writing so it would be good to hear peoples different views and pointers on how i can improve :)

Thanx in advance

Offer still on...

terror in the memory, and terrified.... THANKS!!! i havent had comments in a long time, and this is awesome bc for once my comment wont be a one liner. I will commment you later in return. Im sure, lol ok later

Please do, This Love and Lost In Reverie.

Thank you in advanced.

marcella

i would love it if you could CC on

porcelian tears
underneath her skin
&, i cant resist your smile

thank you so much. :D

Imagination
Screaming Eyes of Beast
Eternal Love(lyrics)

thanks so much, the second one is gonna be for a contest so i definitely want you to look at that one, any others you see that may interest you go right ahead, i'll do a couple of yours no prob!

I want to see how you would criticize my poems. So if I like it I'll give you more. Its a good deal for both of us. You don't do as many, and I still get comments.

Can you please do:

Chaotic Mind

or

Footprints

---- I give you two because:

- I want to see you criticize me

- You might have already done one of them

Thanks Babe!

Ive done them...I think...I hope.

Anymore?

Thanks a lot. :) yeah I also thought that line was the weakest. Loved your criticism. Would give you more but I'm sure you've done them all.

Thanks again Babe

thanks so much for the comments, it helped a lot. i'll check out the things you suggested thank you!

Brittney; Mousie, you're very welome.

i'll do this!! :D

could you please comment

under the influence
dearest father
when a loved one dies

THANKS SO MUCH!! :D

Would you please read Blood's Sweet Toxicity.

It has a rating of a 3.2 and i really have no idea why, the 2 comments it has says it was nice/good/etc.
Thank you very much if you will.

Becca, check your comments hun, I've done all three previously. Any others?

Thank you. and i guess you are right about the rhyme scheme. this is a new poem for me. i wrote it for a contest, and i wanted it to be different; its nothing like i have ever written before. i am going to reread it and change some things you suggested. =]

thank you. =]

It's ok, you're welcome.
It's all down to you what you do with your poem, I just gave my opinions. It's cool if you take them, cool if you don't.

Could you please do

You Never Knew (A Suicide Note)
My Better Half
Falling Short

Please and thanks =)

oh lol.. yeah can you do

- she lives only in winter
- one day ill let this go
- trapped within life (Acrostic)

thanks and ill do 3 of yours as well

This sounds fun.
But, I'd really like to know what's wrong with this poem:

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It's a little ways down, so sorry if it takes you a second to find it, but it seems no one liked that poem when it was one of my favorites... Thank you for the comments.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex