Seven Deadly Sins

CLOSED. RESULTS AT THE BOTTOM.

I've already got one contest going, but it'll be finished in a week, and I really want to get another one going. So here goes:

The seven deadly sins. Choose which sin you want to write about, and then do it. Simple as that. It doesn't have to have the actual word in it, and the title can be whatever you want it to be. As long as it describes the sin you are writing about, then that's fine.

- Four people per sin.
- You can enter twice (2 different sins). No more.
- Deadline: 18 June.
- No cutting/suicide poems.
- It can be any length you wish.
- Have fun.

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01. Lust {FULL}
` xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex [DONE]
` *Gem* [DONE]
` Alyson
` Startle Me [DONE]

02. Gluttony
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03. Greed {FULL}
` xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex [DONE]
` Startle Me [DONE]
` Wings of Flames [DONE]
` EndOfTheBeginning [DONE]

04. Sloth
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05. Wrath
` Synh
` Heavy Hearts Bleed
` Happiness is just a gash away - [DONE]
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06. Envy {FULL}
` *Gem*
` Lush-Fcuk-* - [DONE]
` Synh
` Holly Hellcat

07. Pride
` Lush-Fcuk-* - [DONE]
` Memories of Kana and Hatori - [DONE]
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Hm..
Could we put two together?
If we can..
I will reserve two.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Yep, sure.

Which two would you like?

Lust and Greed, oh yeah!
haha.
You can see where this is going. XD

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Can i have lust and envy please? x

Can I please reserve lust

I'd like to reserve for
Lust and Greed, please :]

Darn I wanted lust, haha.

Hrmm...Envy and Pride please, =]

And great idea for a contest! =]

All right, Startle Me... Take my idea. ;] Lmao. Just kidding.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Envy and Wrath please :) thanks

For All You Have Is All You Need {Double Kryielle Sonnet}

Now grab your lust and grab your greed,
For all you have is all you need.
Take the brush that painted your lies,
The canvas is your alibi.

Push down hard on the dirty brush,
The more you scrape, the more you'll hush
As you realize your life is a lie;
The canvas is your alibi.

Now grab your lust and grab your greed,
The canvas is your alibi.

A magical brush couldn't save you
From all your lies and all you do.
Now grab your lust and grab your greed,
For all you have is all you need.

The canvas will never be clear,
Your lies -- you believe -- are sincere.
Now grab your lust and grab your greed,
For all you have is all you need.

A magical brush couldn't save you,
For all you have is all you need.
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AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Yay, lots of people! XD Haha.

I added one more place to each sin, and lust is now full. :]

Well, if you really want new, nvm. you're welcome to read my 'envy the shallow' poem, if you just want to read sin-inspired poems. don't judge it. and you don't have to comment or rate.

I'd much prefer it to be new, but it can be old if you wish.

Those Girls That I Envy

When he sits here alone with me so flawlessly,
And he talks about the other girls so harmlessly,
He doesn't see the crystal tears in my blue eyes,
When I laugh through it with a pathetic disguise.

And those blonde girls from Hollywood get to him,
With their perfect smiles and waists so slim,
But me, I've got the curse of curves and it kills me,
Because I can't be the girl that he wants me to be.

I smile because it would hurt him to see me cry,
But he doesn't hear me praying to God asking why,
I can't be as beautiful as the girls he sees on TV,
And why a boy like him would settle for a girl like me.

But those words he says get under my pale skin,
As these tears roll down and fall off of my quivering chin,
And this disguise of mine is slowly falling apart,
Because I love him more with every beat of my heart -

And I know that I can't give him everything that he needs,
So I smile as big as I can, and maybe my smile misleads,
But if I act happy long enough for him to smile back at me,
He won't know it's the girls he calls beautiful that I envy.

-Jenna Elphick
May 26, 2007

Lust

The woman cannot think, overpowered
By a passionate, overmastering desire;
Heart pulsing, with the body shivering,
A small instrument this lady acquires.

Willpower she lacks, searches for pornography;
Unusual poses and stances the ladies make.
Yet in the woman's eyes, they are ordinary,
For pornograhy is one of her many mistakes.

Her secrets are waiting to be touched;
The delicate body, trembling with joy.
There is none around to judge nor watch;
As for satisfaction, she uses her toy.

Plaything vibrates for the woman.
Pulsations cause her to go wild.
She moans here and groans there,
Her toy's vibration is beguiled.

Hypocrite she is in her God's eyes
For she is persuaded with temptation.
The throbbing of her toy runs untamed,
Woman has succumbed her frustration.

**I'm soo unimaginative, I didn't even change the title of the name. Lol.

Greed of Lust and Love

The woman sits quietly at the table,
Looking at the girl across in shame.
To be greedy in the eyes of the Lord,
Having none but herself to blame.

The woman questions her emotions
And her needed desire to acquire more.
When would she confess her secrets,
To the daughter that she solely adores?

Promiscuous names, the first reaction.
Expected from ruining the musketeers,
The family of three so happy and free
Are ruined by disappointing love affairs.

Hatred and disgust, the second reaction,
What upsetting, cruel emotions to feel.
The loving trust for her mother evaporated.
Insulted and hurting, she tries to conceal.

Silence would be the third reaction,
Would likely be the worst one of all.
It would be time for the mother to explain,
How she fell for love and was enthralled.

To be greedy in the eyes of the Lord,
Wanting her daughter and her new lover.
Woman wants more than she deserves,
Rejection this mother will discover.

She Swallows The Pain With Her Pride

She stands strong in front of all their old friends,
Holding herself together for the cost of no ends,
And she masks the pain that she feels inside,
As she walks the world alone, numb and wide-eyed.

She's got his picture in the back pocket of her jeans,
And everyday, she looks deep into his emerald greens,
Crying out his name in the middle of the night,
She'll jerk awake, reliving the accident fright.

But her heart is broken and bruised on her sleeve,
Hidden behind her plastic disguise that she deceives,
And if you look at her close enough you may see -
The pain she swallows with her pride in horrid misery.

-Jenna Elphick
May 29, 2007

Anybody else? There's still 15 spots to fill. =/

Umm... anybody? PLEASE?

I have a poem, but it's not that great. Umm... I'll submit it for the fun of it :D! It has some history about the seven deadly sins and it's all acurate which was one of my goals.It's based on pride, by the way :D.

The Sin of Pride (acrostic)

The pope of the 6th century,
He went by the name Pope Gregory,
Established seven deadly sins.

Sins that were unforgivable,
If ever they were fulfilled,
No excuse could save you from the dreaded consequences.

Of the seven sins,
Frightfully, pride was the worst.

Pleasure will not last,
Royalty to be cast,
If consumed by pride,
Death comes painfully,
Each person will be broken on the wheel.

I can't believe I submitted that one... well, there it is. Gruesome, the conseguences, aren't they. Well, hope you like it, and good luck everyone!

Avidité (Greed)

The pigs snuffling at the slop,
All green dollar bills,
Buckets of the richest filth,
And blood is left to spill,

Hold your children bare,
As cold seeps through,
Snorting at the distaste,
Of nothing else to do,

Priests counting coins,
In pews, two by two,
Thinking of posession,
Not the works of you,

Black babies dying,
With promises unkept,
Lifeless limp creations,
In darkness they have slept,

Hold your doll in comfort,
But warmth was never there,
Cold as a single bed,
For no one really cared.

I'm still waiting on seven poems, and the deadline was four days ago. =|

I'm going to extend the due date until the 18th - the Monday coming up.

Please get them in... oh and it's not too late for more people to enter. The more the merrier. :P

Xx The Night Before xX

She loved him with all her heart
Yet that just wasn't enough
After everything that's happened
This is a battle that's too tough

He went off to his stag do
Was overcome by sheer lust
He went home with the stripper
And shattered all her trust

She came home from her hen night
And found them in her bed
She watched her whole world shatter
Questions running through her head

She thought they were in love
She didn't think that he would stray
Yet the night before the wedding
He just threw it all away

Threw it away on a lowly stripper
He didn't even know her name
He never even apologised
Wouldn't stay to take the blame

They were engaged to be married
And to spend their lives together
How was she supposed to know
That he didn't mean forever

*Gem*
Copyright©GemmaStott2007

(I may change it if i have time cos i'm not happy with this one)

I think that judging should begin...

Sorry about this guys, I've been really busy the past couple of days, and I'm going away for a week in three days. I'll try my best to get these judged tomorrow, but I can't make any promises and if they aren't done, then I'm afraid the judging is going to have to wait until I get back.

Thank you for being so patient. :]

Ami? No... (Ayumi, right?). She hasn't responded to my PM... Maybe she's on vacation?

I also was looking forward to seeing if my poem was worthy of being submitted :D

Sorry, I didn't have time to judge before I went away, and I've been gone for a week. Judging will be done tonight. I promise. :]

[RESULTS]

For All You Have Is All You Need {Double Kryielle Sonnet} -- xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

I really enjoyed this. Usually too much repetition annoys me, but here I think it worked well. It was like reading lyrics, in my opinion. I love the imagery created at the start, and how you put something such as painting (an art that people sometimes see as beautiful, relaxing etc) and made it into something used for describing a sin. Good job.

Those Girls That I Envy -- Lush.Fcuk-*

I could somewhat relate to this, I'm sure most girls could. Lots of people have that feeling of never being as good as others, especially in a guys' eyes. Your rhyming and flow are great. A much enjoyable read.

Lust -- Startle Me

I give you kudos for taking a step out there. You really brought the whole lust factor to this poem. It was daring and sexual and interesting to read. I really liked the ending, too. Well done.

Greed of Lust and Love -- Startle Me

Again, I liked this a lot. I like how you really emphasize each of the sins you are writing about. They don't just play a small part in the poem, they MAKE the poem. It's all about the sins that are being played out. Good job, an interesting read.

She Swallows The Pain With Her Pride -- Lush.Fcuk-*

This is another piece that I'm sure lots of people could relate to. I sure know that I've hidden my real emotions when I haven't wanted the people around me to know how I'm feeling. I like how effectively you put this into words, into poetry, and made it a very enjoyable read. Good job.

The Sin of Pride (Acrostic) -- Memories of Kana and Hatori

This is different to what I usually read. It was very interested. I really like reading acrostics, so I really enjoyed this. Nice job. =]

Avidit (Greed) -- Wings Of Flames

The flow of this was excellent, as was the rhyming. It created a really bleak, morbid picture of, we have to admit, reality for some people. You effectively conveyed the sin of greed, and this was a very interesting read.

Greed -- EndOfTheBeginning

I like the use of lines in brackets here. It helps the story you tell of this girl, to easily be told. I also love reading poems that are written in forms that are somewhat new to me, as this one was. It makes it all that more interesting.

Wrath -- Happiness is just a gash away

Interesting take on 'Wrath' you had here. I was intrigued from start to finish of your poem. You sort of described fear; this ruler was so feared, his wrath will forever leave somewhat of a curse upon these people. Very interesting.

"But, look, darling; oh, darling, look!
What's this? He who rules has hung himself?
Oh, darling, he's dead; he's gone, darling,
It's been said that he who once ruled needed help."

^ I felt that here 'Darling' was used just a little too often. Try not to do that, it becomes annoying. But overall I really enjoyed it.

The Night Before -- *Gem*

The flow of this poem was wonderful, as was the rhyming. You should be happy with it, because it's good. I just wish you used some punctuation in it; without it, it's like constant run-on sentences. The reader doesn't know when to stop. However, it was a much enjoyable read.

[WINNERS]

First Place - For All You Have Is All You Need {Double Kryielle Sonnet} -- xTheEcstasyOfSuicex [[SIX r/r/c]]
Second Place - Lust -- Startle Me [[FOUR r/r/c]]
Third Place - Those Girls That I Envy -- Lush.Fcuk-* [[TWO r/r/c]]
Honourable Mention 1 - Avidit (Greed) -- Wings Of Flames [[ONE r/r/c]]
Honourable Mention 2 - Wrath -- Happiness is just a gash away [[ONE r/r/c]]

Well done everyone. This was really hard to judge; everyone's poems were excellent. All winners MUST leave titles for me to do. :]

Congratulations everyone!

XxX Porcelain Angels Shatter XxX - I've commented your poem.

"I knew Noime was gonna win.
Her poetry is just flawless."
^^^
I'm curious as to who "Noime" is? =/.
Anyways.
Thank you so much for the first place. I'm so glad you liked it. =]
And congrats to everyone else.

Please do:
-1. A Poem About How To Write A Poem
-2. Lullaby [Goodnight, My Angel] {Lyrics}
-3. Let's Play Truth or Dare
-4. Being A Poet
-5. A Schziophrenic Can Fall Too
-6. I Pledge Allegiance to the Noose {Triquatrain}

Enjoy!
[And these are some old poems. If you have already done them by chance, just pick whatever catches your eye. =)]

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Sheena, your comments have been done. :)

I had already done 4 and 5, so I did two others instead.

Alright, thank you very much. =]]

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex