One for One

I would like honest feedback, any critique if possible. The poem is called "The Jagged Edge".

I'll also do two for two, three for three - etc. Basically I'll just match however many poems of mine you give me feedback on.

Thank you so much.

Done 1 atm Could you please do my latest one. Thanks alot~mel

Done. Your welcome!

And I'm just wondering, how did I not keep my rhyming throughout my whole poem? I thought I kept it consistant and the words rhymed. But maybe it's just me?

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Sorry aboutt that sweeite I should of made myself clear in that comment on the ryhming. I just ment at first you ryhme was abab around them lines but then to me the shceme changed. Not in a bad way. I liked it but I really liked how it was set up at the start. Hope that clears it up a little better =]

Oh thank you for clearing that up, I see what you are saying now. That's why I love it when people review my work because they see things I most likely never do. When I go into my "editing mode" i'll revise it and play around with different rhyming schemes. Thanks!

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