Need Constructive Critisism

Hey all!

I am trying to improve my writing a little at a time, as I hope to publish a book of poetry in the next year or so. For every comment you leave me I will leave you three.. Please be a critic, as it is really needed, whether it is saying it's good, i need to fix things, or i'm doing something right in any area. Remember, for every one you leave me you will get three in return =)

Hey I am from Tennessee too
I did two