Long Lost Member Back in town...

Hey, I've got a new lyrical poem if anyone wants to check it out and tell me what you think I'd really appreciate it.
I'll pay back the favor, maybe even doubly if I'm impressed and have lotsa time - and if you have a specific piece you want me to see, just post them below... I don't usually do this, but I need some feedback for important reasons.
Be harsh, be critical, and don't cry if I am the same back.
Happy everything. <3