My Love Is Now Closed

by A Good Man   Feb 12, 2008


My Love Is Now Closed
For The Time Being
Its Been Vandalized And Torn Up Inside.
A Person Came In And Ruined It
With Everything She Had.
It Didn't Take Me Long To Find Out Who It Was
Because She was the only person
That Was By My Side When
My Love Opened Up.
Now Its Closed And Getting Repaired Over Time.
Hopefully,I Can Find The Right Partner To
Open My Love Up Again And Keep It Running
Great For The Rest Of Our Life.

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  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    I like the idea of the poem. :]
    And I liked this line.
    "Now Its Closed And Getting Repaired Over Time."
    it was deep, intense. 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Once again, the idea of this poem was good, but you really need to check your grammar.

    For The Time Well Being
    ^^I'm not even sure that makes sense. Just try "For the time being". It will make more sense.

    A Person Came In And Ruin It Inside
    ^^Ruin should be ruined, and I don't think you should use inside again after it was the ending word for the line above.

    Because It Was Only One Other Person
    ^^I think that should be "Because she was the only person"

    My Love Open Up.
    ^^Open should be opened.

    Sorry about all the corrections, but I hope they've helped a little. I think your can make your ordinary poems more better.

    Keep writing!
    Cayce

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