Haha I think it sounds great both ways. It was very creative to write it backwards. I read both, but I do like the backwards version better.
It shows a more creative and expert side to your writing.
i love the first version more because it makes you intrigued in some parts. i love that 1st version is a "look back" which is more intriguing and emotional than just telling a story like in 2nd version. and also the rhythm of the 1st part is better
for this poem. i mean, nothing is off in the second, but there it sounds just a little too dynamic.
actually i don't really know why you were worried if readers understand the poem or not because the message is pretty clear (I consider the message being clear and deep at the same time as an advantage) and btw if i were u i'd put it in "sad" sextion because it fits there more. anyways, the poem s really good, wording is well-done, especially i like the last stanza in 1st version.
ok i think it's 5/5
I personally liked the backwards way better, and I thought that was a little easier to comprehend.
I thought it was great though, that you wrote it forwards too for the people who didn't "get it" as easily. I really liked the first stanza (last in the forward poem) and I loved the alliteration in the line, "Bearing the burden of being alive".
All in all, very nice poem. =]
I enjoyed reading it both ways, it was in a way like a palindrome.
I am commenting on the first one printed:
This poem flowed very well, and i loved the suspense-like parts that made you question. The language you used was really great and i though your emotions were portrayed very well. The one thing i can say i didn't like was the tenses you used were slightly confusing.
Never seen anyone do this before and I loved both. For me it gave more perspective on the poem having it forwards and backwards that is amazingly effective, also giving a whole new depth for me, in basic its amazing!
Its a great poem. Its on life right?
How a man and his thoughts never seem to make sense...but in the end...they become alies...(so he thinks)
im not sure...thats what i thought.....to me though...writing it backwords....i thought it was better:)
Wow no wonder i won a contest.. i love it
i actually like the first one better mainly i like poems that come to the main point in the end.. u explained the pain and what happened and then came back to the main thought which was from the moment u first shook hands with the person
its a really great poem
Very funny poem yet sweet...first time i read i was like wat the heck? then i read the second one and i totally understood it anyhow good idea i might try it this excellent idea..well keep it up bro!
I LOVE this piece to the deep depth of my heart !!!
I truly admired the reverse idea, it made sense for me !
every stanza in this poem is amazingly written
I'm glad it won the contest
very well done you've managed to make it flow really well and without forcing it.