You captured a lot of truth in this poem I really liked it. Overall, it was a great read. I think it would go a lot further with some punctuation and apostrophes and some capitalizations but other then that it's great. I still don't get one line though, I think there must have been a typo. The line is:
You know what? I bet you sat there and thought you could go on and on with this. Kinda like those old cutesy cartoons. But you didn't. And that, I think, makes this poem all the better. You've captured the simply personal things and you've crafted them into something that flows wonderfully and is a good length. Fantastic!
Awwh this is a beautiful poem. I've felt love only once, and you've showed in words just how special it can be.
I particularly loved the ending:
"Your dreams, your life, your everything,
Each tear, each smile a new day may bring"
Amazing ending =] Great work 5/5
8 years ago
Beautiful passionate poem.
Love is all that and so much more on an undescribable level.
4 years ago
by Fires Fade
Wow great poem, you defined love brilliantly.
2 years ago
by Ben Pickard
This is lovely and oozes love and sincerity. You say your words are simple, which I disagree with, but what cannot be argued about is the warmth and complexity of your content. This is wonderful,
All the very best,