Wow..I am officially scared now! Haha, its the good kind of scared though. I love the eerie feeling this piece gives off! Absolutly love it! I also completley LOVE the wording in it. Believe me when I say that it adds so much to it! Great write there!5/5
Wow. This was excellent. Everything was worded so perfectly and the mood was definatly very dark and kind of creepy, in a way. I really want to read this book now, it seems like just reading your poem based off the book.. it seems like a very suspenseful book. This write couldn't have been better, the word-choice was amazing and everything was described perfectly. This poem also held a little of imagery too, which was great. Lots of poetic things in this poem. Keep writing. I enjoyed. 5/5.
I enjoyed the story line though I thought there was some item missing(perhaps my reading "Twilight" first) that would tie it all together. I am not a great admirer of "Free verse" as it mostly has little metre/rhythm these days so it reads like prose to me.
Third stanza, third line "to" to "too"(too numb to move).
as always an opinion.
This poem escalates intensely, and with it comes dark vivid imagery that kept me suspended while reading. At first the intro did not completely capture me, but as I read on I was taken the escalation of it all. Very well thought out, and overall I'd say I would enjoy the read. Great work.