Dreamers Dream (Collab)

by Spoken Silence   Aug 6, 2008


** Written With Lethal Prophecy **

Alas, you're here to be as a living dream.
No longer existing in my nightmare so sweet,
To dream of one such as you; then wake to blank walls
Is but a curse I'm forced to accept.

Dreamers dream, and thats all they do.
But my dreams always consist of you.
Someday wishing for this to be reality.
For without you this would be a fatality.

An eternal bond is what we share,
Forever wishing for only you to care.
To hold you close in the dead of night,
Always knowing you will be my only light.

Someday this dream will come true,
And it will forever be me and you.

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  • 15 years ago

    by amber

    The first stanza is the most powerful of all the others. . . . "Alas you're here to be as a living dream
    No longer existing in my nightmare so sweet
    TO DREAM OF ONE SUCH AS YOU THEN WAKE TO BLANK WALLS IS BUT A CURSE I'M FORCED TO ACCEPT"

    that was my favorite lines.....i know that feeling. i'm engaged and i feel that feeling every morning i wake up to go to college and don't have him beside me. Thank you for the amazing collaboration you and your love did. it was truely a beautiful write.....
    thanks
    ~*~Amber~*~
    check out my work sometime.....

  • 15 years ago

    by XxHiis BooxX

    Okay loving this poem, but in the frist stanza you had no punctuation but in the rest u do.

    but flow was a little off, but overall the poem was great and i really enjoyed reading it.

  • 15 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    The frist stanza you have no punctuation and in the rest you do.

    Also I thought the rhyming was weird. First stanza doesn't, rest does. It just felt like an inconsistant poem to me.

    The idea was good though. And I liked the mentioning of waking to blank walls in the fist stanza.

    The rhyming stanzas were really good as well.

    The last line was powerful. I liked that.

    Overall I just wish the poem was more consistant. I'll give it a four.

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