NICE! whos the puppet now??

"Who's pulling the strings now?"
I love that line.

This is a good poem, but I think there's still some room for improvment.
This stanza needs some tweaking, I feel.
"The master grabs a gun and a shiny knife
Shoots every one
A bullet in their head
A bullet in their heart
Blood splattered all over the walls"
You mention a knife but there is no action done with the knife. I think perhaps you could make this a little less literal, or change some of the words a little.

And this stanza:
"Each victim has a puppet mouth
in their bloody face.
"Who's the puppet now?" "
Needs a line before Who's the puppet now?
The puppet is saying this, so perhaps,
"Smirking down at the bloody mess, laughing,"
But you could probably think of something wayy better than that, haha.

I really really really liked the idea of this poem, it's very original and a little haunting to think about what puppets could do to you. It's great.
I don't think you have a problem with flow here, you might get other comments saying that your form is wakk but I like it, and I don't think it needs changing at all (except the addition of the second last line).
And your vocabulary is great, it really describes the poem well and spooks the reader a bit ;p

Great poem, 5/5

jess ~

Wow creepy, i think this is like every child nightmare. but a very good poem, got me hooked, keep them coming ada!

Well that was a little creepy. but it was good, kinda like a nightmare i'd dream of lol. it was expressed well, and again creepy. 5/5 from me, couldn't find a thing wrong with it. great work

Lol.very creepy:)

Though the imagery is very dark I feel it was like a scary movie I have seen. The poem made me think of it on a metaphoric level also
well written and well done

Ohh freaky. =P I liked it. It was dark but easy 2 understand. I took as not just a pupet but every1's dark disire sorta say. I mean every1 has something that they try 2 hide but it's watching everything. Idk I just thought about that as I was reading ur poem. It was good. The only thing that I would tell u 2 do is just work on ur rhyming a little more but other than that it was good.

-->Rachel<--

I LOVE THIS POEM, i'm speechless.

5/5

Oh My Gosh... this is so flippin great, Its all dark, and morbit I Love It!!! wow... the imagery is flipppin great, I could see the whole thing in my head, this is a great idea for like a movie or something... wonderful... 5/5

I am reviewing this poem and all I can think about is that it's a mix of the puppet master and Child's play the movies.

I like the poem, I feel that it could have been done better. I thought that you might have been hinting towards something like the puppet is an evil voice that we hear inside us, and this is a person who is getting back at all the people who laughed at him personally and the puppet is just a metaphor.

All In all, it was a good poem, not great.

5/5

Freaky, haha good poem. It reminds of Chucky. The flow was good and so was the wording. I liked it 5/5

I love this poem. When I read this poem I was envisioning a little boy or girl who was being bullied by the bigger kids. You hear about this stories where one day the quiet child takes over and kills all those who laughed at his misfortune. I don't think this is what you were trying to get at but regardless it was very well done.
5/5

Ohhh no im scared of puppets and dolls lol anyway i still loved it

Lies Leave Your Lips and Evil Puppet

Again, I decided to read the entire poem before I started commenting.

The story overall was a little confusing. I think I understand the meaning of the poem, but it just didnt seem to flow very well as a story. I thought it skipped too much between stanza's 4 and 5. In stanza 4, they are preparing for the show, then suddenly, in stanza 5, it was over. I think you should drop a stanza or two about the show itself. It would help the story line.

In stanza 7, the first line mentions a gun and a knife, but no further mention was made of the knife. Unless he used it to carve a puppet mouth on everyone (which i really didnt understand), i think it was overlooked.

I like the actual meaning of the poem and the imagery is good for the most part, but I was lost in a few places and kind of lost the scene. I think a little more material would help out.

I would rate it a 3/5, but I didnt leave a rating. I didnt want to drag down your votes.

A decent poem in the big picture.

That was a scary poem and I loved it. That was one of the best poems i have ever read. The flow was really great and the imagery was good as well. This was a really good poem. Good Job.

Excellent poem very creepy 5/5