A Beautiful Day

I absolutely love the optimism in this.
Also, the contrast was very nice, especially when you show all these things that aren't good, but it's still a "beautiful day to be alive."

I'm adding this one to my favourites. :)

Again, you rhymed rain and pain.

In the second stanza subway is too big of a word, why not change it to bus?
I don't understand why today is part of your fate, it's a dramatic line which isn't followed up anywhere in the poem.

The depression part of this poem lets it down a bit, too.

Vocabulary!

Now to the good things;
I loved loved loved the idea of this poem, you created great images which I adore and it's a beautiful day here at the moment, which makes it that much more relevant.
You did a great job of making such a beautiful day =]
5/5

jess ~

I loved this piece =]]
I was doing a random reading and I came across yours..
inspiring title.
I loved the fact that the poem is filled with optimism, makes the reader smile =)

Keep it up xxx