Comments : Death Upon Sweet Oblivion

  • 9 years ago

    by Ray Blue

    Great lines, introduction is perfect~

    Lush, blood-like petals and thorns betrothed
    With dazzling beauty that stuns within
    Tragically beautiful, one might say
    Paying tribute to your melancholic end.

    Powerful, message on your body~

    Flowers resembling but drops of blood
    Spilled across the blades of grass
    Cold, stricken resemblance of crimson regrets
    Stenciled under the sweltering sun's canvas.

    Excellent ending~

    Undaunted, you faced the brink of death alone
    Never told us you were trapped in such awful rut
    And chose to forever etch a smile upon your face
    Yet still, your memories will be kept in everyone's heart.

    The title matched the poem. I would like you give this a 10 if possible here:) 5/5!

  • 9 years ago

    by ForeverASickKid

    Im speechless! amazing work! 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by sheena

    Dili na lang q movote....kabaw naman cguro ka....

  • 9 years ago

    by Eminent Bard

    As usual..

    just what i'm expecting from my idol..

    heheheh..

    four feet up!

    yea!!

    ^o^