Comments : Hide and Seek for Lovers

  • 8 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    Once again a beautifully penned poem. I especially enjoyed the ending.

    "I close my eyes as if to count to ten.
    Intentionally allowing you to slip from sight,
    Unsure if I will discover you once more.

    And you hesitantly withdraw,
    Unsure if I will open my eyes to find you. "

    Almost ringing to the quote "If you love something set it free" You don't know if it will return, but you close your eyes and continue the game anyhow.

    I am definitely going to have to add you to my favorites. Great job!

  • 8 years ago

    by Cara

    This was a really indepth poem.. under the comparisons of childish games, was hurt and despair i felt. You really were creative with this poem and i really enjoyed reading it. The flow was good which added a great deal to the poem. I am really glad i read this.. it was a terrific piece. The ending was very good. Keep up the great work!
    '5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This stuff really grabs attention but we got to get to a larger pond

    great work

  • 8 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I can really relate to this a free verse is much more popular than rhyming poem
    but you ust understand that many critics on this site are not the kind that buy bui the tinme is well spent because they are our costumers in thier own right

  • 8 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Absolutely the free flow and word choice is the kind of writing I would expect t read in something I bought please try to understand this is a highly competitive art that requires promotion which is very difficult and low votes is a product of ignorance yet the high vote should no be taken lightly

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Congrats on your win :)
    Take Care Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by meganmarie

    This is amazing. truly heartfelt and beautiful. amazing,
    --lovedroughtmelody

  • 8 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Congrats on the win....lovely poem!

  • 8 years ago

    by victoria

    I LOVE IT

  • 8 years ago

    by Sora Lynn

    This poem was extremely creative. i was amazed as i read every word. very poetic and the title was perect. job well done. 5/5.

    -Ashlei.

  • 8 years ago

    by mysterious

    I absolutely just love this peom...!!!
    it is so simple yet so deep, and truth behind every word.

  • 8 years ago

    by capturedelight

    Absolutely brilliant!! I could connect with your poem on several levels, a lovely read.