First of all I LOVED the title. Although it was simple...it said a lot.
I adored the repitition of "for you" because it was so sweet and catchy that it is still replaying in my mind. It's really effective in the overall meaning of the poem because it validates what you say of doing anything for this special person and only for them.
The emotions you expressed with your words were heartfelt and made me smile. I always love reading a love poem by a guy about a girl they love because it shows guys have feeling they want to express too! The beauty behind your words just blew me away and I'm curious to hear how this would sound with music because I gave it its own tune in my mind while I was reading it.
Each line just flowed flawlessly with the rest making it an easy yet interesting read. The imagery you painted in my mind with your words a beautiful image of unconditional love and I am sure it came straight from your heart.
Well I dont want to go on and on and on...but I really enjoyed reading this piece.
There are parts of this piece I'm iffy about, but I'd like to think that's because it's a song. When songs are written on paper and read they're a bit different than when you hear them sung. And, It's hard to judge that way because I'm not hearing the actual song. I must say though, I really like what you have written here. Even with the little spots that would be better changed if this was in a poem form. I think that it'll be a great song.
Wow! It's such a beautiful song. Amazing! The rythm just completely flows. I really like your vocabulary used here. And I can completely feel the emotion in this piece. I'm not sure how I was supposed to sing it(in my head of course) but it sounds great no matter what, I think. And my favorite is when you repeat the line "Far away, miles apart" Love it! Great job!