MaryAnne:)

What a story! I enjoyed it all the way and I must say you have a lot of imagination:)
Success on the contest!

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid
ps: If you are into martians you should read "Comunion"by Whitley Strieber. It is a true story about a man who met creatures from another planet. It is an older book, but should still be on file in your local library.

Wow, that is really long. I could never write that much. I think that the flow was pretty good, but not quite there. It was a little off i some parts. And some parts I kind of lost focus and I forgot what the whole point of the poem was, but I think that was only because the length. There is a line in the poem that I'm not sure if there should be the extra 'I' infront of had 'For never I had I seen such a ghostly scene,' so maybe you could change that. Or if it's supposed to be like that, then just keep it. At first, I couldn't understand the whole idea of the poem but I understood it a lot better when I read on. At some parts, I got lost in your vocabulary and had to re-read some lines/stanzas. But your vocabulary is really great, your chose of words is excellent. For me, I like uniqeness in a poem an this definitely had it. I've never read a poem like this, about spacemen. So I must give you props for that. I think once you get to the end of reading it, it's a wonderful piece. But when you see how much there is it's kind of over-whelming. But I also think that the length helps to the powerful story of the whole poem. Very well done.

Soda E>

I did enjoy reading this. I believe your word choice made it flow like a poem, yet the vivid imagery made it read like a portion of a novel
Overall your imagination kept me on the edge of my seat

This was an excellant poem. I think you choose a good topic for your contest. This poem I believe that you put a lot of imagination into the poem but yet it still seemed liked it could of been real. This poem also had a good imagry in a way that it made me feel like I was actually seeing what the person in the poem was seeing. You made this poem good right down to the last detail it seems. I actually really liked it. Excellant job. 5/5

Alright. Reading the first couple of stanzas (I'm not going to remember every bug by the end so I'll do it bit by bit) you seem to have an... odd style. You use 'big words'. Big words are ugly. Big words are very clinical and though I may know what you mean, they are still ugly, and automatically knock a lot of emotion out of it like a punch to the gut. You also use the word weird, which sticks out as being clunky.

Then you do this: Continuously hearing again and again the weird sound. As I said 'weird'. Now continuously suggests something flowing into itself, and is one of those 'big ugly words' I mentioned. The again and again makes it really trip over itself. It's just one line though but it really got on my nerves amidst the other lines.

You use alone twice, don't know if you noticed.

'Reticence'. Erm.

All so still, as if one movement would disrupt peace. Now that is a wonderful image, but you did 'that thing' again. It's not long, it's just a bit, dunno, bleh. Oh and, the guy's winbreaker. Do we REALLY need to know? This reads an awful lot like prose with line breaks right now.

Now there's not much good, and not much bad, until this:
'Stubborn to not be taken away, until it fulfills its duty.' <--- Which I really like. All before it;s like 'stop droning' the guy's either really boring, or you need to cut back on your listing.

Luminous light? You know ALL light is luminous, ja? That's like saying dark shadow. x) Just sayin'.

And I realize how accustomed I had become of it. <--- Snort, that is so true when that happened. Become to it, by the by.

STAND two figures, you muddled a verb.

Yet they don't carry the characteristic of one,
Instead, appearing like space Martians from the cartoons.

So they don't but they blatantly do. Alright...

Place trust IN them. (:

HAHAHA tourists! I've seen all sorts but tourists? Precious! How very sweet! I love it.

Erm yes. I kinda like what you have going on (despite not being a sci fi kinda person in that respect) especially the end, but I'm afraid it just... isn't very nice as a poem. It'd be wonderful as a short story, actually.