Comments : I Want To Watch The Moonlight...

  • 8 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Olwin,
    I have come to absolutely adore your writes. You always seem to write what seems so very close to the tongue and wants to be said, and then to top it off it has a great rhyme pattern to it. It flows really well. Wonderful Job dear. Keep it up.
    Take Care,
    Kay

  • 8 years ago

    by Sourav

    Very free flowing and absolutely romantic. Depiction of the thoughts seems so natural and true. A very good write!

  • 8 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Well done. Ditto to all the other comments. I think we may have all experienced these feelings about that one true love we have. Keep up the good work.

  • 8 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Aw! This poem is beautiful! I love it! You've expressed such lovely feeling and I think a lot of people can relate to this experience... everyone wants to cuddle with the one they love and watch the moonlight and stars! It's the best thing ever. You write about this experience so nicely. Great job! :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Chrissy

    This is reeally gewd :D

  • 8 years ago

    by Tsukuyomi

    Thank you for your comment! This poem is amazingly amazing ^_^.

  • Love it =)

  • 8 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    My type of poem written with simplicity no flowery words with good an excellent flow and simple meter, straight from the heart. An easy read and understandable, whoever it was written for will love this as you get your message across and it pulls heart-strings. 5/5 Ray S

  • 8 years ago

    by Rafael Navarro

    Love this poem hits you pretty deep

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Olwin
    what a beautiful poem of love you penned.

    Sweet moments here I cherish,
    With no thought of self or time...
    Just knowing every heartbeat,
    That you take so close to mine.

    These words brought back so many memories for me. Beautiful dear just beautiful

    It fills me.. it completes me,
    The love you've given me...
    I never shall forget it,
    Because it's become a part of me.

    This is how a prue true love should feel :)
    Excellent job!
    ~Hugs~
    Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by Sexual hysterias

    Aweh, I really love this poem. It's very sweet. :]

  • 8 years ago

    by In Darkness I Dwell

    I really enjoyed reading this poem. So much emotion was wrote into it

  • 7 years ago

    by Kuro

    This was a very romantic scene you described. very nice ^_^. also i love the night, just about everything about it.

  • 7 years ago

    by Martha

    I love every lines!!! wow! I was affected because it was related to me (about my love life) Love this poem 5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Another Nice Write!!!

  • 7 years ago

    by Anthony M

    This write feels so very real and heartfelt, I can completely relate to your words and the emotion with which they were written. Very pleasant read indeed:)

  • 6 years ago

    by Jessica

    This Is An Amazing Poem.
    Dont Let ANYBODY tell You Diferently.
    I Loved It And Such Raw Emotion!
    Keep Writing, PLEASE?!?:)
    Im Going To Keep Reading Your Poems=D
    5/5
    It Would Be Great If You Could Comment And Rate My Last Poem? THANKS!

    Much Love, Jessi.

  • 6 years ago

    by Randy East

    I really appreciated your comment on my poem soul mate. so I thought i would return the favor and come back and read more of yours.

    First off... me and you have the exact same style of poetry writing. I really dig that about you. I really liked this poem. It would be perfect for a hallmark card.... seriously : )

    a few small changes I might make.

    instead of:
    I'd rather be than be with you.

    you may like:
    I'd rather be with then with you.

    also.. perhaps change Coz to "because",
    but make the line above it a bit longer to
    help the flow.
    as in:
    Comfortingly next to you...

    could be:
    As I lay comfortably next to you..

    just a thought.

    And lastly, the entire poem is Great.
    but there are too many "Me"s at the end.
    if you can repair that... it might help too.

    if you get a chance, check out more of mine.
    cool?

  • 5 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    It fills me.. it completes me,
    The love you've given me...
    I never shall forget it,
    Because it's become a part of me.

    --Nice Ending..and I like this part too..Amazing piece:)

    xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

    :=)

    5/5-C

  • 5 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    What a wonderful poem Dreamofolwin!!!
    Simply beautiful words here! Loved it!
    Keep writing your magic!!!!