A Journey Into Your Life

I adore this piece, Italian.

"resolute journey. A journey, through"
- I'm all for repetition and ^^ is the reason why. The way you repeated 'journey' gave it the flow it needed and the added emphasis, as well.

"Your love encompasses me like my sun-tanned skin"
- Know what I like about this? It's all about love in a way that's all about you. Obviously you've repeated "I" and "my" everywhere, but I think that this is a more sneaky way; "encompasses ME" and "MY sun-tanned" is much better than "I, I, I, I"

"taste the luscious tenderness amidst my lips,"
I get where this is coming from, the whole coffee thing and all that, but I'm not too fond of "the luscious", it strikes me as odd. I'd imagined something along the lines of "your luscious" or no word there at all.

I was taught when I was younger that commas are a necessity in poetry because, and ONLY because, they separate things while you read aloud, to give it the flow that's needed. I don't know if that's true. I like to create the flow with them quite often, but sometimes they screw things up BIG TIME....when overused. So, that's something I'd watch.

The title really caught my eye. When you can't stop thinking about someone, you wish to know everything about them, whats on their mind and in their heart. I already know I'll enjoy this one.

"Everytime I daydream, I dream of you."
^The simplicity here was just beautiful! A great way to start of your poem because I could tell that this would come straight from the heart.

"...derived from blissful moments in a resolute journey."
^I love how you worded this. "derived" "resolute" Great word choice!

"through littered roads with broken hearts,"
^I like the contrast from light to dark here. How sometimes the journey isn't always rainbows and butterflies but you have to go through the bad to get to the good

"It's a exploration in the lines of fire in which I'm willing to partake."
^Not all are brave enough to pick of the pieces of a broken heart, I admire your courage.

"You're the coffee that I drink"
Coffee! Reminds me I need to get some. :]

"strong, bold, and sweet. I can taste the sweet tenderness amdist my lips,"
^You mean"amidst" The repetition of sweet kinda threw me off.

"I can smell the floral fragrance emitted"
^Loved the alliteration.

What a wonderful ending! I liked how you tied it in with the beginning. Very heartfelt poem Joe and one I really did enjoy. It was like an escape from reality into a heart filled with love. Beautifully expressed prose.

Well done!

*5/5*

Your title is obviously more eyecatching the way it is, but may I suggest doing something shorter like.. 'Daydreaming' Its up to you, but shorter titles seem to go over better, but then again you have a great one.. very eye-catching. :]

'Everytime I daydream, I dream of you.'
`Simple beginning but I like it.. whenever we daydream it is normally centered around that one person.

'Your love encompasses me like my sun tanned skin, derived from blissful moments in a resolute journey.'
`Loved your word choice, I think sun-tanned may be written like that with a hyphen.. other than that a very beautiful opening.

'A journey, through littered roads with broken hearts, not a destination.'
`I have never seen something so clever.. littered roads with broken hearts - well done!

'It's a journey in the lines of fire in which I'm willing to partake.'
`I loved how you said it was not a destination, its truly a journey.. however, I think it'd be best if you used a synoymn for journey here, youve already repeated it a few times.. but the first two times I felt it was necessary but this time maybe try something different, you could maybe either replace with this one or one of the above with 'adventure' or 'stroll' .. not sure what else could be used, youll find something though.

'You're the coffee that I drink: strong, bold, and sweet.'
`Comparing someone to coffee is unusual, but then again anything you do reminds you of this special person.. great metaphor here.. truly beautiful words.

'I can smell the floral fragrance emitted; and I tell myself, I must be dreaming, dreaming of you, once again.'
`Great alliteration with floral fragrance.. liked the repetition of dreaming.. it flowed nicely.

'They say paintings paint a thousand words,'
`Paintings paint? I didnt like it really.. and not sure why..

'well I hope the same is true for poetic prose'
`Ohh, Joe! Brilliant.

'Reality recently smacked me right in the face, I must admit, I must of been blind...

I daydream, whenever I'm not with you.'
`Yes yes.. when we daydream we tend to block out the fact that we're really living in reality at that moment and when we finally wake up we are 'smacked' by the fact that its not real and that person isnt next to us. You did a great job with the ending here, truly a beautiful piece, so sweet and cute. A lot of us day dream of one special person when they arent by your side.

Well done :]

A good attempt considering poetic prose is something that takes a bit of work. It needs refinement and what this piece seems to lack is clear concentrated thought.

'Your love surrounds me like a tan embracing my skin'

Could be rephrased as it's a bit clumsy. A tan doesn't' surround, so another word could be picked. If her love is like a tan, perhaps you're trying to say that she is the sun, which isn't a bad notion. It's your word choice that is a bit off in this piece. Every word is essential in writing, one word can throw the whole thing off.

'an sentimental journey. '

Minor error, it should be 'a' not 'an'. I also think 'sentimental' doesn't quite get forth what you're trying to.

'It's a journey in the lines of fire in which I'm willing to partake.'

I like this but it almost contrasts with the scattered images of this journey. Broken hearts, sentimental, line of fire. None of these really can be strung together.

'You're the coffee that I drink: strong, bold, and sweet. I can taste the sweet tenderness amdist my lips, I can smell the beautiful fragrance emitted; and I tell myself, I must be dreaming, dreaming of you, once again.'

This could be really trite and cliche but I really loved it. Well written here. I wouldn't say 'beautiful' though. A relating description to the 'coffee' image perhaps?

The following stanza is very awkward though. Paintings paint a thousand words, yet youre contrasting this by writing about the painting you're painting in the words? Leave out the reference to the 'journey' here too, because it doesn't follow very well from the previous sentence.

'Reality smacked me right in the face. I must of be blind...

I no longer daydream, because I have you.'

This could be better, cause I can see what you're trying to do. Don't say 'I no longer daydream', say something like 'I daydream when I'm not with you' not them words but you know what I mean. Don't be so telling.

A good effort Joe, with some flaws, but you did well.