Comments : Midnight Serenade

  • 8 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Raj,
    What a beautiful piece you have written here. It is as though walking through a fairyland with the descriptions. Thoroughly enjoyed and your poetry always holds so much magic and beautiful descriptions. Great Job

    Take Care,
    Kay

  • 8 years ago

    by Sylvia

    A beautiful nature poem. It made me hum along as I read. Well done.

  • 8 years ago

    by Twisted Heart

    Nice poem. A bit of whimsey about it. I did find one typo I believe:

    Beneath the midnight sky of June
    cuddled in silky stands of moon,

    Is it suppose to read "stands" or "strands", maybe I am mistaken.

    Anyway, again, nice job.
    Always,
    Jeannie

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Raj
    This poem is stunning.

    Beneath the midnight sky of June
    cuddled in silky stands of moon,
    violet blends reflected by
    shimmering glow of firefly.

    Wonderful imagery, and word choices. your words have created a magical vision for the reader.

    Daffodils in pinkish gown
    crickets jumping all around,
    pearls of dew rest on a bloom
    near the tawny plump mushroom.

    I'm loving this journey through your mind with you dear. Beautiful :)

    Slowly skyline stirs the hue
    Orange mixed with tinge of blue,
    grey silhouettes fade away
    sunbeams spread its magic spray.

    Awesome job Raj!
    ~Clapping~
    Love Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Vivid imagery, good flow and rhyme! Nice job!

  • 8 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Simply Wow!!

    So beautifully written poem, just loved it.

    ~Speechless~

    all the best and take care

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Daffodils in pinkish gown
    crickets jumping all around,
    pearls of dew rest on a bloom
    near the tawny plump mushroom

    I just adore this verse and the image of
    daffodils in pink gowns is simply beautiful..
    good one!
    The flow as well as rhyme was really done
    well making this a smooth read..excellent
    write :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Wow this was absolutely impressive.. such clear descriptions give us beautiful imagery to look at as we read. Awesome work, flow was spot on. Such a joy to read such a beautiful nature poem.. it made me smile.

    5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    Loved this beautiful.. descriptive poem of nature ! Wonderfully penned! and a joy to read :] I loved it.

  • 8 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Beneath the midnight sky of June
    cuddled in silky strands of moon,
    violet blends reflected by
    shimmering glow of firefly."

    I really like how you describe what month it is and where this poem is taking place. Also, in the second line "cuddled" adds so much imagery. I like the way you worded everything in the second line, its just so unique and not cliche at all. In the third line your words kept my attention and had me visualizing every word. The fourth line was one of the best in this stanza. I love the word "shimmering" first of all, its out there you know? Its not a plain kind of word. The rest of the line was written so beautifully I just had to read on.

    "Daffodils in pinkish gown
    crickets jumping all around,
    pearls of dew rest on a bloom
    near the tawny plump mushroom."

    Wow, you know I sometimes find it harder to rhyme without it being forced, but here its just wonderful. The first line was the best in my opinion. I would have just written probably "Pink daffodils", but you have gone beyond that and this just painted such purity and beauty in my mind! The second line was okay, I felt it to be the only line that wasn't as unique as others, but it was still good. In the third line, more creativity! Instead of just saying "sparkling dew", you say "pearls of dew", nicely worded, that just blew me away! The fourth line was cute, it made me smile that you put mushrooms in your poem, nice job!

    "Slowly skyline stirs the hue
    Orange mixed with tinge of blue,
    grey silhouettes fade away
    sunbeams spread its magic spray."

    A stunning ending, truly this just left me speechless. The first line was so deep and entrancing and the second line gave the reader even more colors to imagine. The third and fourth line had me wanting more, they were just so flawless. 5/5 from me, you are one terrific poetess. There was so much creativity and originality oozing out of every line. High five for that! I am going to nominate this for the weekly contest, good luck.

    ~MaryAnne

  • 8 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    "Beneath the midnight sky of June
    cuddled in silky strands of moon,
    violet blends reflected by
    shimmering glow of firefly."

    Breathtaking images in words smooth as glass

  • 8 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Awesome flow and beautiful imagery. I loved how you used the word cuddled in the second line, truly unique. Well done.. only one word can truly describe this piece and thats beautiful.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Well, this was a delightful read:)

    Daffodils in pinkish gown
    crickets jumping all around,
    pearls of dew rest on a bloom
    near the tawny plump mushroom.

    ^^

    This to me was the most descriptive stanza, but they were all very beautiful.

    Well done,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 8 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    5/5.Wow!Believe,me the very first poem in my life which made me dance in my thoughts.The beautiful hue of colours,the flow,the imagery,are stunning.
    Keep going,you are really talented.God bless.

  • 8 years ago

    by Christopher Wry

    Nice flow and good imagery.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    I love the simplicity and expressiveness of this poem and it has a nice easy flow and an easy to follow meter. Just one thing the last line I think would be better if their was used instead of its.

    My kind of poetry simple and lovely to read Ray S 5/5