Comments : Here Stands the Glass

  • 8 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Simply Awesome,

    So many things may come to pass
    Stay true inside the grief

    Upon the shards of glass are tears
    That time may try to heal
    Inside the mind are wasted years
    The soul tries hard to feel

    Such beautiful lines, very powerful, loved it

    all the best and take care

  • 8 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    An amazing write... aww I just loved it. Very powerful, yet delicate writing that so touched my heart. Your a wonderful writer... who can truely express on paper the pains and turmoils of the heart... LOL
    An exquisite piece of writing in my books!

  • 8 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Well done. Not only a love poem but sad as well. The pain and sadness can be felt very strongly.

  • 8 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Jeannie,
    I have always been so intrigued by the way you tend to weave your words and the flow always seems so effortless. You have reached that plateau on this level again. Beautiful write. A love poem yet with a touch of bitterness to the past.
    Wonderful write as always.
    Take Care,
    Kay

  • 8 years ago

    by mzlovehate

    A bit sad but I loved it.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    Yet again I am baffled that up to today there has been 1236 visits to your poem and only 5 have bothered to comment and score this absolutely wonderful poem that has all that is good in any poem. It is beautifully metered, it flows with no hiccups and it actually makes sense. I have been there and know how fragile even in the strongest heart can be.
    Love the incisiveness insight of this part of the poem in the second stanza:-

    A heart's caught unaware
    Deep in the mind a turmoil comes
    To shatter life it seems
    Leaves the wounded heart unstrung
    Among the broken dreams

    You have caught the feeling of total hopelessness and then in the last stanza point out time may be the only answer to the shatter heart. Absolutely wonderful I choked up reading it. 5/5 for its excellence and I voted it for the competition Ray S

  • 8 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    There is nothing to add that hasn't been said. A great poem
    A sad yet beautiful write. This was winner material
    Impressive/

  • 8 years ago

    by recklessdreamerx3

    This is an amazing poem.

  • 8 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "When pain has tipped the heart of glass
    And time finds no relief
    So many things may come to pass
    Stay true inside the grief"

    A excellent opening, I like how you just are positive and give off a sense of hope here. I found this whole concept brilliant and well-penned.

    "Where turns the clock that spins the soul"

    The wording here is fantastic and simply pulls the reader more in to your words.

    "If trouble comes along
    To chill the hurt and find the hole
    Inside the heart done wrong"

    Great work so far, this is just stunning!

    "Somewhere beneath the moonlit glow
    A burden's left to bear
    Against the winds of winter's snow
    A heart's caught unaware"

    Your descriptions hold my attention and you express all the pain and emotion so well.

    "Deep in the mind a turmoil comes
    To shatter life it seems
    Leaves the wounded heart unstrung
    Among the broken dreams"

    Wonderful word usage like "unstrung" was very unique and fit well, and so did "turmoil".
    This is a powerful write, keep it up!

    "Upon the shards of glass are tears
    That time may try to heal
    Inside the mind are wasted years
    The soul tries hard to feel
    But come the day that pain is eased
    With hope the heart is caste
    No strings to twine the pain apeased
    'Til then...
    Here stands the glass"

    Wow, what a striking ending, just simply beautiful. Such much meaning you portrayed in yoru words, and you words were felt by the reader. Congrats on the win, you really deserved this! You have much talent and it shined through on this poem.

    A very impressive poem, keep it up!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Congrats Jeannie :)
    Love Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by Attila Nyitrai

    Good job! i like this poem! 5p

  • 8 years ago

    by Khrista Brewster

    Wow, i love this one. some people don't know how exactly to write poetry. but i gotta say, you do :) keep it up..

  • 8 years ago

    by waiting for the unknown

    Bloody brilliant. The flow was beautiful and it had a terrific timeless class to it. five out of five stars!