Grief

I realized I lived in grief
I never thought my life was brief
a generation full of war and wrath
a time when no one would want to live...

I feel this too. This generation doesn't feel whole, everything seems so empty.

a time when no one would want to live...
I felt I was deceived...
I feel unappreciated...

I like this part. I used to question why I was placed here. This world is close to tearing apart.

Strong feeling like the fiercest lightning...

For me, this seems to be out of place. Probably the weakest part of the piece.

I embraced it all
and never let it fall...

This next part was okay. Kinda got back on track.

My heart was crushed and burn...

You used crushed and burn to define what was happening or what has happened to your heart. But it would be better if burn was past tense because the other verb is in the past form.

Gently waiting for night to end
gently waiting for daylight.
when that time comes,
I know the time had run out...
the hours are gone for me to live.

Really liked this part.

I never had a chance to freely shout...
I realized I lived in grief
I never thought my life was brief
a generation full of war and wrath
a time when no one really wanted to live...

I like the ending. Hopeless. The repetition of lines made the piece whole.

All in all a really good piece :) 5/5 Keep writing.

-X

I like this piece. I can't explain why tho lol coz I'm daft. 5/5, Em

I dont like the 1st stanza which is odd because i love the last, it has such an impact at the end which makes it fit well. Most of the poem was good, though there were 2/3 lines that semed to be noticibly forced. Not bad.

~IBE