Comments : Cody-Joe

  • 8 years ago

    by Randy East

    A sad poem,
    Im sure that the person that you wrote this for, is very proud and happy that you will always remember them.

  • 8 years ago

    by No Need For A Name

    Very well written, moving fluently throughout. Strong words are used and I really began to think that it was fantstic. My only problem is the ending, it really does not seem to conclude well.

    Peace and prosperity,

    (RKD)

  • 8 years ago

    by jescelle

    I agree, the imagery was great! You took the reader to different places, that was nicely done. I do see a conflicting aspect in the rhythm, right at the last stanza, and it made me somewhat lose the feeling you built so strongly with mere construction. It's a simple matter of making the first line in that stanza longer than the last, just like all of them. All in all, still a 5/5 b/c I definitely felt your emotion!

  • 8 years ago

    by TK

    To be honest, I can really understand your point of view. One of my good friends from high school committed suicide 5 months ago yesterday. It's a tragic thing. You're poem isn't alluring but the simplicity draws the line of connection between life and death.

  • 8 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is the most amazing poem I have read in a while and I would be proud if it were my epitaph

  • 8 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    Recall and memories of sorrow are so full of tears yet life goes on. I have read so many poems with woe and sadness since I joined this site and this was a good effort but it has not got the bite and anguish needed to make it stand above many that have my excellent. 4/5 a good poem Ray S

  • 8 years ago

    by Gooberz

    I reall don't know what 2 say to this poem, it is greatly written an well i never have thought of writing a poem like this. it was a great idea and was greatlypenned

    Raindrops
    5/5