From a poetic viewpoint I loved this poem, however like as somebody else said, I felt it had too much empahsis in it, so much that it felt fake. Nobody's love is that true and pure unless it's from a fairytale. I can appreciate good work which is what you have, but the realism is sorta far fetched, but that's what poetry is...escaping reality, so all in all it's a good poem. 4/5
Okay for people downvoting because they think the love being portrayed is "to real". Just because you haven't experienced what I am doesn't mean it doesn't exist. This isn't my girlfriend of two weeks it my fiancee, so if the only reason your downvoting is because it seems so good and true.... well find something else to downvote on because it is real and true. Just thought I'd clear that up.
I rather enjoyed this poem. Your word choice was fantastic. I'm not usually a fan of love poems, however, I must say this was truly something special. I'm not a usual fan of rhyming poetry either, however, you took it and made it something else. Throughout the poems I come across and read, I see forced rhymes that makes me want to strangle someone. With your piece, that was not the case. You used rhyming in the way it's supposed to be use. You presented it well and made it flow throughout the piece. I also enjoyed your mention of eternity, and then happily ever after. It all worked very well together. Great job. (:
Again Karl it was an amazing piece. Even though it was divided into two stanzas longer than the usual 4 lined structure, you flowed it well. The rhymes were beautiful, the images you put in this piece were so romantic and just breathtaking. I simply loved it. I wouldn't have written in better myself.
Awwww.... I'm speechless! This poem is so beautiful!!! I loved every word... I got goosebumps! This is such a romantic and heartfelt poem... your expression of love is just so true and sweet... Amazing poem!! Well done! =D