Truth be Rendered

Beautiful! :) 5/5

Hi there i really enjoyed this poem, it is full of emotion and a travelled journey. It carries you along till the very end, Well done. Now this is first for me as I've never critiqued a poem like this and the last thing i want is to offend in anyway. You can even delete this comment, But this poem has a lot more potential so in brackets I have made some minor changes which in most cases is only deleting some filler words like and, has etc, in a couple of others I've suggested slight structure changes to give your poem more strength, but thats totally up to you as I like the poem anyway so take as little or as much as you like.

To the point,
My purpose is rendered,
Now at the end,
I have surrendered,

My story not told,
No one knows me, (never to know me)
The day has grown old, (This day grown old)
And has passed by me, (has passed by me)

I stand here starving,
My soul is empty,
I have seen many things,
My journey is never-ending, (My journey never ending)

For what its worth,
I kept my morals, (I've kept my morals)
Though I've spilt blood,
I have never quarrelled,(I never quarrelled)

I stand here now, (I stand before you)
Shaking, and cold,
One day I hope to teach you,
To always stay bold,

Never lay down your freedom,
And never sell your soul,( never sell your soul)
It doesn't matter if they hate you, (Does it matter if they hate you)
Just because you don't fit there mould, (Because you don’t fit their mould)

You don't have to comply,
You don't have to conform,
Just look them in the eye, (look them in the eye)
And show them to the door (Then show them the door)
,
Live your life,
Be honest and true, (Be honest be true)
And know, with no doubt, (Know without doubt)
That I am watching over you. (I stand watching over you)

Cheerz Nicko