Smiling through the tears is something that at sometime in our lives we have all done. The only suggestion I would have is not to capitalize the first letter of each word, especially him and he since that usually indicates a reference to God. (Only capitalize him and he at the beginning of a sentence.) Keep writing.
I think you have poured all your feelings in this poem.
and i feel that ur hanging out between pain yet love..
never let someone break you, only cause you love them. cause it will be too late after it.
This is really good.
the couplets went together really nicely so the poem had a nice almost bouncy feeling, even though its really sad.
That makes sence!
That the poem is about staying strong i really admire.
but i think u spelt dignity wrong. i probably did to tho... :)
For starters, take the apostrophe out in your title, it should read "I Smiled Through the Tears"
Secondly - capitalization of every word is rather distracting & improper, I would only capitalize proper nouns and such, it looks sloppy otherwise and doesn't grab my attention.
I thought it was nice to start the poem out with a question...usually you don't see them put at the beginning of a poem, but I thought it worked rather nicely.
Won't needs an apostrophe in line 3.
Second to list line - I believe you meant dignity.
I thought this poem was okay. The rhyme was forced. But as for the message, I thought it was clear. It's good that you have the courage to stand up for yourself and not let someone use you, someone would definitely gain satisfaction if you let them. I thought you did rather well expressing yourself, there were just grammatical & formatting issues.
Your titles are very interesting and I can relate to many of them, especially this one. It seems as if we both have gone through something similar. I like how you mention that we smile through tears. Sometimes we take a chance at something, like love, that ultimately doesn't work; and although it hurts, we still "smile through tears" because we were sincere....
This poem carried your emotions well with an optimistic end to it... Good work... :) 5/5
6 years ago
Wow. This is amazing. It is short and simple, yet still intriguing all the way through. It has emption and story and an excellent word choice to convey your point and your voice within the piece. So many poems are written just the same as this, but somehow, I am not sure how, this is very unique. You have penned a marvelous piece. 5/5