Comments : I Smiled Through The Tear's.

  • 6 years ago

    by liiz

    Thank you for my comment and rate!
    this poem is amazing! I feel like u wrote it for me when ofcourse u didnt but its great! 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by KemistryKia

    I LOVE THIS
    its sooo raw with emotion and its sooo real
    returning the love
    peace & love : Kemistry Kia

  • 6 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Smiling through the tears is something that at sometime in our lives we have all done. The only suggestion I would have is not to capitalize the first letter of each word, especially him and he since that usually indicates a reference to God. (Only capitalize him and he at the beginning of a sentence.) Keep writing.

  • 6 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    I think you have poured all your feelings in this poem.
    and i feel that ur hanging out between pain yet love..
    never let someone break you, only cause you love them. cause it will be too late after it.

    and well done :)5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Carmen

    Beautiful job. This poem is so vulnerable. I love how strong you are, like not letting him push you down and not giving him the satisfaction. You are a great poet. Keep writing, dear!

  • 6 years ago

    by Chris

    A really great poem. I especially enjoy how I can relate to it. It's true that when we're betrayed we can't let it show how it affected us. We gotta move on and become even stronger.

  • 6 years ago

    by Black Heart Still Beating

    This is really good.
    the couplets went together really nicely so the poem had a nice almost bouncy feeling, even though its really sad.
    That makes sence!
    That the poem is about staying strong i really admire.
    but i think u spelt dignity wrong. i probably did to tho... :)
    **Brii

  • 6 years ago

    by RainbowSlider

    This poem shows your real talent as a poet.

  • 6 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    For starters, take the apostrophe out in your title, it should read "I Smiled Through the Tears"

    Secondly - capitalization of every word is rather distracting & improper, I would only capitalize proper nouns and such, it looks sloppy otherwise and doesn't grab my attention.

    I thought it was nice to start the poem out with a question...usually you don't see them put at the beginning of a poem, but I thought it worked rather nicely.

    Won't needs an apostrophe in line 3.

    Second to list line - I believe you meant dignity.

    I thought this poem was okay. The rhyme was forced. But as for the message, I thought it was clear. It's good that you have the courage to stand up for yourself and not let someone use you, someone would definitely gain satisfaction if you let them. I thought you did rather well expressing yourself, there were just grammatical & formatting issues.

  • 6 years ago

    by Siglawoo

    Amazing one.... and i am sure you meant " dignity " instead didnity in the 2nd last line.

  • 6 years ago

    by XxFallenxFromxGracexX

    I really like this poem it shows strength and determination, the rhymes are really good and just generally the way its written really great poem =]

  • 6 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    I think this could have been better if it was a free verse poem because the ryhmes felt forced. The message was clear your delivery just wasn't at the same level. Keep writing though. Nik

  • 6 years ago

    by ericbow

    Nicely done!

  • 6 years ago

    by Mikaela DLC

    There were some typos but, the emotions and wittiness of the poem is splendid^^

  • 6 years ago

    by Daisy

    Your titles are very interesting and I can relate to many of them, especially this one. It seems as if we both have gone through something similar. I like how you mention that we smile through tears. Sometimes we take a chance at something, like love, that ultimately doesn't work; and although it hurts, we still "smile through tears" because we were sincere....

  • 6 years ago

    by H E Losey

    A plethora of punctuation errors and the rhythm fluctuates.
    Dont...DON'T
    Wont....WON'T
    Game's....GAMES
    Tear's....TEARS
    eye's....EYES
    Trouble's....TROUBLES

  • 6 years ago

    by LivHelen Kernan

    I know there r technicalities to writing however I still believe ...if u bring emotion to an individual in ur writing you've accomplished ur goal....such emotion this brought to me...love it

  • 6 years ago

    by Ali Khan

    I love it!!! reminds me of someone!!! :) a vote for u 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by RustySoul

    This poem carried your emotions well with an optimistic end to it... Good work... :) 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Wow. This is amazing. It is short and simple, yet still intriguing all the way through. It has emption and story and an excellent word choice to convey your point and your voice within the piece. So many poems are written just the same as this, but somehow, I am not sure how, this is very unique. You have penned a marvelous piece. 5/5