More ppl need to view your poems, I am going to ask some of my friends on here to give a look.
I love your openness and gentle soul that seems to be. A poet with the heart of one.
This was very pleasant and serene.
I really think you have done an excellent job with this piece. The use of the slight details and all the description of who you are is amazing. They way you used each simple word showed your "true" voice in this piece. There are hints of emotion in this piece, but they aren't too subtle, or too bold either, so that helps this piece a lot. There is a nice flow. Overall this piece is terrific.
When we got through and experience every aspect and emotions of life, that is when we have truly lived and learned to be a human...this write needs to be read by many, many others. Really liked this and the honesty behind it :)
near and dear and not so near
with my own heart and soul
It may not take from it to put "yet" were the second and is but if it were just me I would not be bothered but many critics count off for three and's in two lines and dislike the word "and" almost as much as the The poem is excellent as far as I am concerned