Comments : Warbird

  • 7 years ago

    by Cindy

    Great piece. Really makes you think about how things are all over the world.

    Fame, Glory, Grand illusions
    Shameless acts of modern wisdom
    Vindicated as prophecy
    Whilst superseding freedom

    I think in the work force so many corporations take advantage of their workers. Very sad and wrong. Maybe one day they will see without these workers they would be nothing. The workers are the backbone of society.
    Excellent job!
    Love Cindy

  • 7 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    So much is happening around the world and
    some fail to see the real people and things
    which makes them..liked the read :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Appropriate words for todays business world and the world as a whole.

  • 7 years ago

    by Jad

    I really liked this poem. The message is really suited for how the world is today and I think you hit just about everything on target. The poem itself was full of life and good messages that one can glean from reading. :] The flow of the poem was rather smooth and went line from line. There were also a lot of emotions hidden in this poem that can be felt as well. Great job and keep writing.

  • 7 years ago

    by kelleyana

    Very well said. Enjoy my read.

  • 7 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Powerful statement.

    Curious about your choice of 'justify' in line 2.
    How would that make things transparent; I say that in the sense that corporations are adept at justifying their 'non-disclosure'

    Manipulated peace hurled
    I take this to have a double meaning:
    1 - That the exposure of corporate doings causes much of the industrial-military complex to colapse & bring peace to those areas affected
    2 - That the complacency allowing the rise & continuation of corporate greed is a thing manipulated by the corporations themselves, so that exposure gives rise to confrontation of this evil.
    I suspect you worded the poem to capture both meanings, whether deliberatly or unconsciously.

    Also, did you mean 'conscience' in line 16.

    Great work.

  • 7 years ago

    by Kiko

    In America, the most popular "religion" is capitalism and "God" is the green dollar.

    Nice job with this!