This is, of course, a beautiful piece of poetry, written in exquisite language and brimming with emotion. The language you have used here is not Elizabethan (Shakespearean) but more like late 19th century or early 20th century American English.
My only issue is that it feels like you are writing a scene in a play, and acting it out, rather than expressing your true feelings. In other words, my head likes it, but I don't feel an emotional connection to the words you have penned, even though the words are obviously charged with emotion.
TRIals of light? trials of right?
really really really?
GOSH,.,.this was sooooooooooooooooo
I can't believe the depth that you can achieve, the poems I've seen so far, just GOSH like NANA SHAME ON YOU, and all the comments you ever made.
Can't believe I haven't read THIS!.
Friends would be amazing, if they could deserved such a piece lol, perfect from all sides ;), you have a way with words..mhhmm.mhhmm..am a sleepy gal now u know..yet i was sinking in the sensitivity and depth of these poems..
I will make sure to read all!
FIVEE! and the nightingale gta be my nomination this tuesday.