Comments : Berry Picking

  • 6 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    LOL my god you know why am smilling, I felt like being in a field..or just be a part of this amazing "scenario" if you allow me to call it that because it makes one very

  • 6 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Attached to the piece and the characters...I loved the title actually again lol, maybe cause i love fruits or because u know how to get the attention of your readers.

    I love this stanza :

    Step like a dancing ninja into bare patches
    to avoid briars yet not trample the berries:
    ^ verryyyy flowing!

    lift leg high, turn on heel, set it down
    three feet away, shin still gets scraped!
    Jessica delicately paces along the hillock
    as in a dance routine well practiced.

    ^ just like the rest of the poem, it sounded exciting and thrilling (in a calm way)
    reminds me of a spring field YET summer time..if u know wat i mean

    I enjoyed this a lot, ans sorry the comment got cut :)

    5/5

  • 8 months ago

    by Hellon

    Just came across this little cracker today and loved it. You set the scene perfectly.I almost felt I was there with you both! Loved the reference to the dance pattern...it made me giggle as I imagined you trying to avoid the brambles while trying not to crush the berries. Excellent write and I'm glad I finally stumbled on it!

  • 6 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Larry what wonderful memories this poem evokes. As a child we spent many hours gathering BlackBerry and taking them home for mum to make BlackBerry jam.