LOL my god you know why am smilling, I felt like being in a field..or just be a part of this amazing "scenario" if you allow me to call it that because it makes one very

Attached to the piece and the characters...I loved the title actually again lol, maybe cause i love fruits or because u know how to get the attention of your readers.

I love this stanza :

Step like a dancing ninja into bare patches
to avoid briars yet not trample the berries:
^ verryyyy flowing!

lift leg high, turn on heel, set it down
three feet away, shin still gets scraped!
Jessica delicately paces along the hillock
as in a dance routine well practiced.

^ just like the rest of the poem, it sounded exciting and thrilling (in a calm way)
reminds me of a spring field YET summer time..if u know wat i mean

I enjoyed this a lot, ans sorry the comment got cut :)

5/5

Just came across this little cracker today and loved it. You set the scene perfectly.I almost felt I was there with you both! Loved the reference to the dance pattern...it made me giggle as I imagined you trying to avoid the brambles while trying not to crush the berries. Excellent write and I'm glad I finally stumbled on it!

Larry what wonderful memories this poem evokes. As a child we spent many hours gathering BlackBerry and taking them home for mum to make BlackBerry jam.