When i grow up

Excellent write, Eddie, as usual. Well done.

My impression of first..second and third stanza... is like a child writing his stuff of what he become someday....but when i go on reading this piece unfortunately turns all to dark..how nice!great work...

Wow!!! This is a perfect poem, the voice and good change slowly but dramatically. There is a nice flow, and a great choice of words. I gave it a five and its on my favorites list

It was different. Saw nothing worth changing.

gave it a 5/5

Woah this was almost childlike but then turns I loved it very creepy.